tired of being poor and broke
 

im sitten in the dark with no lights thet got shut off //

this shit grimmy even my mom took off//

i been wearing the same clothes for three days//

the repo man even took my tooth paste//

im so poor and im so broke//

i tryed to kill my self but could'nt afford a rope//

i tryed to over dose off of trazidone//

i robed the nigga that broke in my home//

no one gave me any change even though i showed respect//

im so broke the operorater would'nt let me call collect//

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upin thoughs people

ayo people dont sleep on this

DoNt SlEeP oN tHiS sHiT

It was a good small piece...it was basic but it still flowed
I liked how you put humor to such a bad situation.

thanks dawg you was real honest with it ill hit you up if you want ...upin more thoughts

not very good low vocab could be better elevate and try it again it was good for what it is...

still upin thoughts

..You seriously need to elevate..all the open mics I've read from were terrible..read other peoples open mics(I'm sure you already do)and learn and take pointers..cause this was terrible..you can only get better...

basic... ya need to liven it up... throw some internals in and some decent vocab... and be original... and get a good flow going...

I liked the humor but it was a bit basic try throwin in some more complex words and sentences and you'll have urself a decent open mike

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one more come on

Aight man, it was good but I saw lots of room for improvement, for instance on your choice of vocab, and it was kind of stretched out for me, it felt like it was tuffer to read like that but that's just me. Keep raisin your own bar and improving.