The Dreamer
 

The eternal bleeding keeps this man believing
Without reason theres no hope for achieving
So he grips delay..lets the life slowly play
For the shadows gray..an the man lost his way
But the moment severs..dreams are forever
..Opens His Mind..
The huminly treasure..and focuses on plesure
Thus sees true meaning..devils stop screaming
His head stops leaning..he begins to dreaming
Reaches out slow..as does a flower preparing to grow
As the peek climaxes pro..he sores as easily as a crow
With out a worry in sight..just a moment thats right
A dream from his life..
realising..
Dreams are special..not a dramatic sacrifice

So he reaches for his priorities..and grasps to his wishes
Determinly grabs fates maturity..prays..so angles listen

Granted him a unselfish command..
..that..
He could become an honest man

thought it had good flow, but it seemed repetative, the way you rhymed it... some internals would take that away... make it read better... also watch the syllables... keep at it

^^thanks uppen

Yea i was deffinately feelin this verse... I agree with Dev that it came off a lil repetative tho...

The eternal bleeding keeps this man believing
Without reason theres no hope for achieving
So he grips delay..lets the life slowly play
For the shadows gray..an the man lost his way
^^Feelin this

- 1d

..Not bad..not bad at all..good flow..although it was a little repetitive..decent rhyme scheme..overall decent..