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Dev 01-24-04 12:02 PM

A Thing Called Rage
 
A rush of adrenaline like instant amphetamine
Seeing red ya explode like Armageddon has set within
A testament testing limits, to try ya best to win
Without mentioning, cos its uncontrollable by anything
Jus a specimen, of emotion that cant be defined
With courageous devotion, overriding your mind
Settling when the level of pressure has declined
Manifests again, any time, when another steps the line
Yes until then, confined, lying dormant and laid to rest
Designed as a reflex to convalesce from the mess
A primal urge, emerging instinctive if it’s pressed
Concurring to the temperament associated with stress
And on a pivot weighted by what you like and detest
At best it’s less, at worst can engulf and result in death
With the final breath taken away from the rib cage
Left with nuthin in place, except a taste to engage
Cos it’s an unpredictable weapon, its… a thing called rage

Penskills 01-24-04 12:57 PM

..Once again..great piece..great vocab(once again even for you..)..great line to start the rhyme..and great imagery..what more can I say..this is Dope..

Dev 01-24-04 04:32 PM

thnx.... uppin

Wise Mynd 01-24-04 05:01 PM

Good piece here good vocab. 9.5/10
peace.

Dev 01-24-04 06:16 PM

WOW.... thnx for that breakdown.... i see what you mean, that bit could be improved....LMFAO...

Dev 01-25-04 04:28 AM

come on ppl...... quit sleeping....

LuMiNåRy Te-X-t 01-25-04 05:39 AM

GOod shit............ggreat vocab an rhyming obviously...
shit was sik..
only one of the few open mics ive peeped...an one of the better...

sum parts were a bit choppy..sounded lile a bucnh of words rhymein really.nuthin to stand out ..u gotta think of a bit better rhyme scheme n ya shit shud be off the huk..

LuMiNåRy Te-X-t 01-25-04 05:39 AM

damn i just blazed a dub blunt to my dome ..shit was cronik...............

anyone need any?

COM 01-25-04 05:48 AM

the first few lines were a multifest with good vocab,,, you slipped off a bit towards the end but even that was dope... if you'd carried on the level of the first few lines this verse might have been legendary... the first FOUR lines were extremely dope.. well done and keep elevating

It 01-25-04 07:02 AM

hey this was nice to read but im drunk so it didnt make any sense but i enjoyed

Dev 01-25-04 07:29 AM

well go take your pissed ass away, and come back when ya sober......lol


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