Can u just rate my first time at dis shit?
 

I just wana c wot u tink
ASC r my cru
DA names r relevant 2 british

The tightness of my metaphorical lyrics
Exploding in ur brain lik advanced physics
The chemistry of the equation
Word on word causing earthquake tremors
From Rochdale bungalows to New York tenaments
I'm spittin my vocal testament
Caught in the fury of belligiment
Between body and mind causing a fake figiment
Twistin and rippin lik Roy Keane on a ligiment
Causing more destruction dan any government
My words blowin in ur brain it is imminent
Dat dis wil giv u brain loss causing a speech impediment
Using pen + paper as my rhyming implement
I write facts dat may start an incident
I'll get u drinkin 40's 'n poppin pills for merriment
My words blowin thro ur brain lik and open vent
Now its time for u to stand in line from orders off da ASC regiment

how many times you going to post the same shit elevate get some more rhymes you have to say as much shit to get props man keep posting and battle cats

..Decent vocab..but that was the only decent thing..

ok shit....needs a lot more than that....heres some pointers...make a little more creativity in ur flow...imagine the first sentence as God is good...the second should continue with the topic god is good...but different rhymes and imagination....thats all im giving u

lol.... good job thats all ya giving, its WHACK.... just build on ya scheme drop some nice internals and multis... and word it better so its nice and smooth... basically keep building....