K-Mill, Zig Zag, Espana -> Keystyle plz rate
 

(K-Mill)
Okay, Start, Let's Go, Girls get down on the flo'//
From the wall to the window, while E-Rod plays Nintendo//
I make the girls shake, even harder than cupcake//
Cuz straight from the start, we can't be stopped//
Red lights turns green when they see me, some think wack cuz I smoke weed//
Nigga the only way to win is to bite, and you'd have to bite off me, Cuz only I can beat me//
I knockin' heads off, you jackin' heads off, remembe me?//
My chain is frosty and Decemberly, girl I don't carre if ya name is Kimberly//
I'll just FUCK YOU, I say things Alot, Mostly I mean 'em//
Yeah, My bitches, everybody seen 'em, and all they is hot//
I ROC THE MOTHA FUCKIN' MIC, YOU BITCHES GOTTA ROC PINK LEMONAIDE//
(Zig Zag)
You could stand in the shade, I still burn you, You could be getting paid, I still own you//
I have you crashin' down like unloco, yeah so what, my skin ain't cocoa//
Compared to me your all cowards, ya'll bitches ought to take showers, Your a pussy & you like flowers//
All this adds up to be, you one wack M.C., you shouldn't battle me//
Your flow couldn't rattle me, I give your girl the shocker, give you the duece glocker//
Remove ya organs, get 'em laid like a whore gives, just like Kuniva said//
You couldn't fuck with me if I was performing at an orgy, Cuz When I step up to the mic ya'll rappaz change stories//
Like "No D-Z, I didn't call you a dyke!", Shut up bitch I'm tryin' a talk, I leave your body outlined wit chalk//
(Espana)
Yo! Back up, track up, another hit for Espana da Pimp, Like Banner & Flip//
I like A PIMP, Actually I'm the definition, The point ya'll missin', Cuz I got dos girls kissin'//
All you can do is listen, what is it you invision, you dick ridin' a certain Piston, well guess wha' you gettin' dissin'//
I'm from North Side Kansas City, We Give no whore's a pity, Cuz we ready//
Pimpin', KC beats out STL, 8-1-6 burns 3-1-4, I could even take 5-0-4//
9-1-3 & 8-0-8, ya'll bitches need me to educate, while you fuckers masturbate//

We did this when I was in Kansas City.... I had my nigga E-Rod write out what we were sayin' and I was wonderin' if ya'lls had any imput.... thanks

oh shit I forgot the rest....

(Cupcake)
My flow is bueno, the others all come from Paseo, Straight feed you mayo, got me sayin' hey ho//
I'm rippin' out niggaz guts, Deliverin' death like Pizza Hut, Pleasurin' ya girl in the butt//
I'm the pimp of the universe, I could beat you with any verse, some call it a curse, then they land in a hearse, Cuz these faggit ass rappas walk wit a pusrse//
When I'm mentioned they all tun, Lyrically eat 'em like a cinn-a-bun, Cuz I da one who win-a-ton, Burn you until-I-Done//
Tie you to semi's what your body split, I fuck your girl yeah I do the clit, you'll be screamin' cuz acid's in my spits, you'll lose like they New York Knicks//
(Heath Dogg)
I'm Heath Dogg, Murda ya with teeth dogg, eatin' ya girl out like a hog, See now I rap without dogg//
So slob on my Knob, like it corn on the cob, somebody quick pray to God//
Heath D-O-Double-G, With K-Mill of F-R-E, We break through all the peckers, drive double deckers//
Deliver chin checkers, Alaska is hard-core, ya really make me hard whore, so shut up bitch, suck my shit//
This finger is for all ya'll, who don't think we ball, So PHX-A-Z, Fresno Cali, KCMO, and ANC we ballin'...

Well isnt that a lot to read lol....your structure needs some work, try to shorten the lines down a bit, cause they are stretched out and lose the // at the end of your lines....vocab was alright in this.....had some ok multies....but just fix that stuff up...keep at it.