my flow,
 

left hand jab jab kill him with my knive,
take his wives live and away with his life
vocals, slit ya throght no vocals
aint no witnesses and got away with the locals
i flip the coin, heads you lose//
15million ways to die you slewed
strangled, with a fishin rope got tangled, mangled thats what i did to the landlord ,strangled and left to lie
dats what it like wen escys on the mic....
ill slew u
dont think i wont slew u,
introduction im still gonna slew u,
its escy, step to me ill slew u,
da boy from da bury will slew u,
dont fink cuz of my age i wont slew u
step on da mic with me ya get slewed
dont test da esc ya get slewed
aint directin this to anyone cuz....
directin this cud getta a boy vexed
and da boy whos vexed will get slewed.

picked off, bluid get me

Hail Eskiboy*****

alot more from were dat came from.
just a little bit of style. Hopefully itll be read da way i wrote it... feed back so far much appreciated!!!!!

Blud, diz is UK Slang and da US bres wont understand summa the words in it i think. Plus i reckon dis is better for UK Garage Shit.

Yeah he's right^

You can't rhyme the same 2 words of everyline, this is hiphop, not garage. It gives the impression that you have nothing else to say.

keep spittin' though

wasnt really feeling this... it started off flowing ok, but then the syllables go every where and knocks it... keep the bars around the same length, and dont rhyme with such simple words, especially the SAME word... keep your drops original, and make em interesting... return the favour

this was pure garbage..just another E-THUG....

think u need a bit more elevation.....i really dont mind basic spits but this was way too basic....work on yer wordplay and ur rhyme scheme a bit more

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Yeah this wasnt all that good here man.....you need to elevate.....work on some better content, try writing about something meaningful to you or something like that, not "Im gonna kill you!" stuff, write about what comes from the heart or something to that effect....but keep at it man.