just spittin fire
 

You Can Spit Rough/rugged/hArd Like My Dick/but If It Aint Real Your Spittin Some Bullshit You Faggots/fake Thug Niggas Tryna Rep/well I'm From Marcy/where Cats Get Strectched/ Coke Connects/on The Roof With Broke Necks/youre A Broke Tech Nigga In A Shoot Out With No Vest..

look the advise that's gonna be givin to ya from me is straight up so don't take the shit personaly, for starters you need to learn how to break ya bars i couldn't tell what the flow was suppose to e like, next is the topic which wasn't there none what so ever i understand that it was like a freestyle so you don't really need a topic but at least have something similar,and the next thing to jump on is the length of the rhyme which was bare minimum put more effort into the shit, you also might want to spice the shit up with some punchlines multies and even some metaphores if you don't know how to do that kind of shit ask somebody they'll tell ya aight, just uppin shit you'lll get better

Alright man, nothing personal but you need to get your lines and everything set up so that people can read them and understand them better, check out some of the other posts on here and you'll see what I mean. And if you use more complex words it will make your flow better and give you a better chance to come up with something clever, I know this cause that's what I'm trying to learn how to do right now also. Other than that just keep working at it.