Government Herding
 

From the age of 9 I was confined to the art of school
Just I naïve kid, dreaming, but blind to everything cruel
Just another fool, immature, thinking I knew my route
Misguided through the years by a corrupted institute
That ya forced to commute and attend without dispute
Cos the law says its required to desire what it suites
And what it shoots, so we’re all firing the same revolver
Loaded with bylaws, making the establishment stronger
But lists longer, cos unemployment rises every year
A quintessential problem that needs solving everywhere
Cos its unfair to label people, box them up like antiques
Categorised as one thing, placed on a shelf outta reach
Its a basic breach of moral beliefs, cos circumstances vary
Cos It’s a free country to be what you please… well nearly
With a fairly broad horizon comprising of intrigue
Residing throughout the world of possibilities and dreams
So why remain in a role, unfold to break the weave
Just do what you feel and believe, and ignore the attitudes
Break the herd, head for the hills, to a different latitude
Cos it’s a dull world in the wrong role, so if I had to choose
Id choose nuthin but everything… cos then you can’t lose

Dope..you continue to amaze me by your smooth wordplay and flow...your scheme was excellent and I truly lover your content of the rhyme..very unqiue..as all of your other projects are..this is one of your best I've read in awhile..peace..

--[Flow]---
Flow here was smooth, you had some dope internals, especially within the first few lines:
"From the age of 9 I was confined to the art of school
Just I naïve kid, dreaming, but blind to everything cruel
Just another fool, immature, thinking I knew my route
Misguided through the years by a corrupted institute" - really shone through, showed your talent and ability to rhyme fluently.

--[Vocab]--
Vocab was pretty good, very consistant...you didn' suddenly launch into an attack of 12 syllable words..you spread the shit out evenly, and kept the simplistic words and rhymes to a minimum..dope!

--[Concept]--
Liked where you were coming from here, it oculd be said that this topic is played out...but to be honest it's near on impossible to come up with a totally orignal concept..big props on this aspect, you came out well, put your point across and kept me intruiged and wanting to read on.

--[Overall]--
This was certainly one of your better pieces, think you reall excelled in your vocab/wordplay and flow..was off-the-hook...4/5..keep this shit up..will look forward to reading more of this type of quality of material!

It was aiight...wasnt all that to get too hyped up on, but worth the read.

thnx penskills, rhythmic. appreciated......^^hey you... quit with ya free postin....

i enjoyed the wordplay and vocabulary, cuz not too many emcees seem to possess that.
the verse was nice cuz i can feel that 100%
thats the type of verse the majority of individuals should try to compose; in reference to the flow, vocab, and creativity..

keep postin' son

peace

thnx again..... anymore....

This drop was a very good read, I liked your rhyme schemes, it flowed well, I can't really think of anything wrong with it, it shows me some things I need to work on in fact so thanks for helping me out. Keep posting and I'll keep reading, thanks for commenting on my piece.

thnx.... pleased i could help ya out....

Yeh this had a nice concept...very important matters to touch on
your flow was nice and I seen some good wordplay as well.

thnx... uppin for some real feedback