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[Wk1]DªÖ vs Dixie Normous
Verses Due: Tuesday February 3rd, 2004
Voting Ends: Saturday February 9th, 2004 Topic: Work Of Art |
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Work of Art
...I sit staring at a blank canvas, with a mind full of ideas... ...Paint brush in my hand ready to make new frontiers... ...With one swift stroke, I create 7 massive oceans... ...Then with 3 more I make the clouds and put them in motion... ...I then tackle the land, mix blue with yellow and atlas... ...I make beautiful, colorful flowers to decorate the grass... ...Paint the sky shades of blue and in other parts red,gray or black... ...Design a male species and for company,draw a female to match... ...I make up forest habitats where the animals flourish at... ...Knowing they'll adore that, I do more natural acts... ...Create lakes, rivers, streams, deltas, and even waterfalls... ...My admirers ask me am I finish I reply "Not at all"... ...I easily accomplish in mastering the art of rolling hills... ...And for the thrill I place mountains in the distance of flat fields... ...Carve deeply in caverns to produce mind boggling labyrinths... ...So wanderers can establish that they're staggered and my work is fabulous... ...Look to the space above you, so you won't forget your relationships... ...I also display an promised constant art gallery of constellation pics.. ...I've been working on this peice for 6 days, it's going to be nice... ...Before I'm completely finish, I call upon an incredible light... ...Finally I create man and woman, their lives start... ...I am God, this life, this word, is my favorite Work Of Art... |
.......Sweat trickles painfully down this paranoia of being watched Pale white face sight erased as the blood runs thru the shock the omen, the stolen life of shadow peirces the open night close fist around his stick clenches stronger closing fright the expression of this lonely man was in pure hatred in this raise lifted my stomach my heart my soul with the lifting of his blade my body jerks with the swing as i find my soul n body awake.... I saw my death in this dream, death of my pure loves in the serene One memorie lay still, the horse of shrill death was already deemed intracit blueprint links will be torn with my wit ill run away yes flee Jump to the swift of my stallion sworn to protect my awful greed for my lover will never die without my saying, never ever willingly as she begins weary her tired eyes begin to close so hastely yes!..escaped the unescapable death,close this chapter as she rests lay her down to explore this new world of unlimited possiblities suddenly, most mysteriously, my feet are drawn to the soft clink of a mallet and a rock, the artist on this takes time to think moves backinto his shadows as to battle with foolish links the sculpture holds my soul in its intricite paterns and folds impressions of this will surely roll the years to be told among aspireing artists, students and scholars that mold must meet this man, mantic artist who holds such power on this rock but as his features become visible a familiar sense of shock as he holds his mallet in hand my pupils focus upon this crest engraved are a man mounted on a horse with anger on his chest i look eye and eye with death, now know the error of my ways he smiles as hes finished with the lettering "Here lies Lyle Drake" my pupils widen he doesnt know my identity he doesnt know my fate articulate some words"lets have lunch"as the murderer puts down his slate ..what to do as we seperate, i ask to spend the night for this is just the bait as this storm bursts thick and his wife begins to shake, ill lift with me a knife .Ill Drop my curtain and let My lover sustain her Drapes. ...Cold deaths hand meddles clearly in these lives, for God is a poet.... ...A man Dreams of Murder,his lovers fate he decides, for he wil hold it ...The Artist featured is God as he teaches ironic lessons the hard way ...He foresaw a face, didnt notice that it was his hand that held the blade..... |
damn..:(...I always get the good ones..good verse..lets get some votes..
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ur verse was good.
i liked the outcome/topic. never thought of work of art that way. Good battle. |
I wish people would vote on our battle:(
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This was an nice battle..pretty close..
D@O~Nice piece..I liked the concept..it was dope.. Great vocab in the right spots..just boring.. Nothing touched me really in it..but.. I think maybe that's what you wanted.. Cry~Suprisingly nice piece since I've never heard of you.. Good vocab, a little short handed at times..still a nice piece.. Though still boring..I guess it must come with the topic.. V/-Both were nice pieces to go with the topic.. My vote goes to D@O..I was just a little more interested it.. And I think he came on top technically.. But I do hope to see more of Cry..that was a dope piece.. Props to both.. |
Vote : DaO
Kry had a pretty nice verse to the topic .. A unique take on the subject .. Executed his ideas and concept nicely in this piece .. Good job .. Dao's verse juss did this a more for me .. I liked his verse better for some reason .. He took the topic dopely .. And wrote his verse dopely .. Seemed well thought out and planned from the beggining to the end .. So he gets my vote this time around because I vibed with his verse a little more than I did Kry's .. Props to both on this battle tho .. One |
okay..cool..Im glad to be back..C-sec banned me cause I beat him in Checkers on aim..lol..
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Vote: DoA
DoA had a great sence on this topic a very broad delivery which made it for a goood execution. the imagry was well done...and so was the emotion very complex work. Kry you had a goood verse but your emotio and imagry didn't show up as easily as DoA. You had a good verse a lot of good things about it but i on't think you did as well as you could have. |
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this thing wont let me edit..so.. http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...358#post1167358 |
Dao wins
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