Im hear now
 

At funerals amazing grace ya momma gon sing em/
Then I grab my SMURF and wit they gunz they gon BANG EM/
You faggot better not get cute/
I’ll split ya fuckin head open wit a timberland boot/
14 years old but im still a man/
dawg we can get it on and poppin like bacon on a pan/
yo you know me its I.V.O.R.Y/
you wanna know why im nice dawg don’t ask why/
the bitches that be chasin me in the hotel all im’a tell you is bye/
you don’t really want to mess wit this dude/
im pushin muh fuckaz wigs backs and takin em 2/
the east side is where I run my block/
we catch you callin us the boon dox my niggaz will have you scared str8 like a snitch talking to a cop/
I need a girl to share my riches/
But now its hard to find a gurl cus all these niggaz is bitches/
I wonder when im gon get som soon/
Cus im lookin for a groupie bitches wit breast like air ballons/



yo give me some tips on how to improve my writing

upppin

very simple..too simple..you had good intentions..but..that was about it..your flowed was boring..and your wordplay didn't help either..keep rhyming though..you can only get better..peace...click on my sig~~~

uppin