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Tommy the 45 01-29-04 05:02 AM

My Expressions
 
Why am I so serious? Why are you so curious?/
say my expressions are mysterious & deleterious.
To my own well being, I'm so emotionless/
can only express after long times of smoking 'cess.
No one expects me to lose it, always quiet and courteous/
but out for blood over small matters & I'm the thirstiest.
People get impatient 'cos I always seem latent/
never taken by excitement & never blatant.
Apathic, feeling I lack it don't bother with tactics/
only harsh & drastic 'cos my heart's soft like plastic.
A blank face, can hardly express myself with words/
can't be heard, only things that calms my nerves is herb.
I can be pitiful I just chose to live a life that's cynical/
anything can happen & I wouldn't think it's critical.
You can understand me without captions just study my actions/
everything I done has been due to some sort of compassion.

Menik 01-29-04 01:35 PM

This was alright here i thought.....structure was alright in it.....you seemed to have some good vocab in there, liked that.....it seemed to flow pretty well i thought, stayed on through out the whole piece....content in this was alright....but keep at it.

Penskills 01-29-04 01:49 PM

you have drastically improved since your last post...(it's weird)..anyway this was decent..you had a decent vocab and content going on..keep working on it..~click ~journey~ on my sig~


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