SS: Right Now
 

Yes… At this instant in time, while I rhyme is our true era
I don’t mean writing. I mean we’re in our prime… future leaders
Against the latter generation, that congregation of misbelievers
With chauvinistic values against a new world of dreamers
And innovative ideas, the believers that out reach malevolence
Pulling the future to the present and the past into irrelevance
Making any sense? I mean live loud, before nows the past tense
Cos right now is our day if ya haven’t started… let commence
Cos after a peak there’s a decent with plenty time to repent
So the ‘current’ should be compelling, ‘30.000 volts’ that you invent
Cos in time you’ll find that lines n cracks appear in set cement
And once its crumbled, its only the foundations ya built that are left
Jus memories like lost recipes, but ya still taste em on ya breath
So don’t stress, ya don’t want them bitter… I prefer a flavoured quest
Without regret, so I live direct, with every moment a laugh
Its true!… a polygraph it’d flat line, prove my voice makes the math
Cos its fact, the best times equate to youth on the clock
By my watch, the alarm’s off, and wont wait, so don’t stop
Cos Right Now we’re young and proud and deserve to sit on top…

Yo this was good.....Very good wordplay!.....Flow was very consistent an easy to read....had some really good lines in there as well......

Cos in time you’ll find that lines n cracks appear in set cement
And once its crumbled, its only the foundations ya built that are left

I like that line right there....shit was nice......damn if theres anything i could say would be ah..........o yea watch the beginning of your sentences....you started alot of them with "Cos"......really good read i thought. keep doing your thing man! peace

This was a really nice read, it was easy to follow and the word choice made for good visualizations. And like the guy said above, the only thing that I can really see that's wrong with this at all is the starts of your sentences, it doesn't really take away but it would make it nicer if you used more variety to start out sentences.
I'd be very greatful if you could vote on a battle I had awhile ago, no one will vote on it and I've been replying to stuff on here for awhile, if not that's cool to but if you could that'd be good, it's vs KLO

thnx....ill hit ya battle later....... any more feedback?....

Flow was strong pieces. Very nice wordplay used, Nice Metaphors to start things off. One Problem that I had..Many times you forced some of your words, especially in the first two lines. It depends on what accent you use, but it came off as forced to me. Dope drop.

Nice flow...it had me going...liked how
you put tha multies in at tha vital parts
of tha lines..that really helped tha flow
Some good vocab..not much but what
was there was quality...good read..props

Dev...you continue to amaze me with your skills..and now you have learned the greatest skill of'em all(FREEPOSTING!)....hit me up for a collab...LOL~~~

compared to you Pen, im inactive.... ya should be a postman....lmao.... atleast id get my mail on time.....

come on people.......

i love you to.........upp!