Brethren vs. Puertoricanelly
 

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im in nigg go ahead and bust first ill be patiently waitin

No, 7:45 for both of us, no matter what, called blind spit

im leaving you infected like a rusted knife in yo skin, you might call yo self a vet but i killed you in this battle so now they gona call you a has been/in lamen terms this battle is for adults and your jus a lil kid, whatever the fuck you got ta say ill still kill you and im about ta close the lid/you say you like women but we all know its tha otha way around/ ull be dropped by the king so jus hand me ma crown/i think killin is a pleasure so dont try ta run/like i know whatcha did las summa theres no need ta rap back its all said and done/i jus vaporized you and your allies, theres no time to fight back just say your godbyes.

Puerto Rican? Get out of this battle site, go and play some baseball,
Hustle you for your money, you don't know the rules, why you 'hitting the 8-ball',
Watch this coward fold more than than a fucking 'burrito',
Whilst I hit him with punches more effective than placebos,
Watch me kill this dude excessively, like adding a's and o's at the 'end of words',
Watch my tender serve, your verse still stinks, even with mento's herbs,
Think of it like this, even if I beat the shit out you, you still going to be guilty,
Won't get off easy in court, just like here, no need keep the murder clean, you already filthy,
Like 'Pisa', even if you were 'Big Ben' you couldn't re-bound from this,
You fell "short", now "stop", like R. Kelly's date, you left found in piss.

In line 5) Spanish is like the same as English, just add a's and o's on the end. (If you didn't get it)

Line 9) Big Ben, also Ben Wallace, best rebounder in the NBA, if you don't keep up

Went a little crazy on the racist jokes, but they worked, hope nobodies Peurto Rican.

Punches:B
Wordplay:B
Meta’s:B
Creativity:B
Personals:B
Flow:B
Multi’s:B

Vote: Brethren

This battle was a blow out. Brethren won this battle hands down in every category. Puertoricanelly, you need to elevate ya text skills. None of ya lines really flowed and ya punches and wordplay sucked. CONSTRUCTIVE CRITICISM!


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brethern was haten on were he from and his shit
didnt rym most of the time so my vote go to
puertoricanelly fo acually rymin

Vote gone.
-Axe

Brethen You Got Dis In Every Catagorey Punches Personals Congratualations

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=110974

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Token did you see M.C. Shadows vote??? Shadow, what the fuck do you think a battle is? Uppin #1.

uppin #2 bitches .

My vote goes to puertoricanelly his flow was better. Brethren's so called lyrics were just to plain If you have to explain your ryhmes when your done rappin then you should just think up a whole new punch.

And this line is wack-
"Watch me kill this dude excessively, like adding a's and o's at the 'end of words',"

Obviously your very ignorant for the fact that you think spanish is that simple.

OK, fucking kids, lemme tell you a story about how somebody rapped about something and it actaully happened.

Wake up motherfucker, you think I'm going to actually kill puertoricanelly, this is a battle, of course I'm saying shit like that, cause it's a battle!!! I use that as an example for what you said. I'm coming up with material, get you biased ass out of here.

I'm learning Spanish right now, so who's ignorant?

I explain my verse because little kids don't understand half the shit people write.

lmao... this is all newbs

well this is my brake down

flow n structure:_ i think that breth took this becasue he had an ok structure and the flow was aight. peurto you need to fix your structure and your verse i wasn't feeling at all

punches n personals- Brethren took this by far with the personals on perto and the punches he threw in thier, peurto you need to aim more at brethren.

overall- brethren- took this with a far better verse, both elevate

Vote, you wak motherfuckers.......... uppin #4 .

brethren got this he had good punches vocab and flow.....u also had good word usage..puerto u can to soft in the punches area and your flow was kinda off so my votes goes to brethren


VOte:brethren

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