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MuhThugga 01-30-04 11:06 PM

One Rock(Dedicated to Relationships)
 
One rock
Broken in two
One side shatters to pieces, the other remains strong
Until it is thrown back in the garden....

The Necromancer 02-01-04 12:21 AM

I'm not feeling this.

I dunno why either. Generally, I'm one who will be first to say "Less is more."

But that's not to say this wasn't good. Logically, I should be feeling this. It strips away all the unneccessary stuff, and just spits out a metaphor of simplicity.

I dunno, maybe I'm not feeling it because I have the flu. But either way, keep dropping.

~Islam~

varentao 02-02-04 08:26 PM

Fairly simple. Does the job through a strong enough metaphor. Though on it's own as it is, it can seem a bit weak. Emphasis on can.

...resp...

filed 02-03-04 03:29 PM

really i like how you decided to show this. it was a nice metaphor, thou i too think it would be more effectful if there were more, but this is still great in its own way. shows a good and real umm lesson you oculd call it in a very simple, but different way.

~Tera~
DONT HATE


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