My Lyfe [part 2]
 

Did it end to my liking, exciting and full of vigour
Fighting with the world… living on a faulty trigger
And has it configured to deliver all that I expected?
Or have a messed it, was it contested… was I a winner
A blatant sinner?… well here’s the story so far…
24, banned for drink driving… now I aint got a car
My family disowned me for fighting with my pa
So ‘a stroll in the park’ don’t really coin my phrase
Cos its dark and im heading for the midnight space
I can’t erase the past, but it contrasts to a sealed case
Locked, blocked and binded… a finished race
That I replaced with the present… with fucking ease
Didn’t have to dirt its knees, begging saying please
I was relieved to conceive an end to that chapter
Because I didn’t deceive… it was spawned from laughter
Flip’d n read wrong exploding… an un-natural disaster
Spreading faster than a rash infecting my family
So ive drawn a line under, and labelled it… Tragedy

This was a nice drop...nice structure...good flow...good descriptions...I Felt this was better in some points then Part 1...because it grasped me a little more...your vocab was good...i liked the concept...very good work...keep it up

ok t6his piece was nice its juss ur flow was off..
u had nice description juss work on flow....

flow was off...lol.....ok....

this was nice as aways..so I'm gonna up it for you..freeposting!!!!!!!!

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yo wasup homie..drop was strait fire, the vocab, wordplay, rhyme, flow was there..evrything was there homie..overall the drop was flame, keep doin ur thang

Peace
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ill hit yours when i got time.... but thx......

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Like the rhyme sceme u used. ALso like the feelin i got from readin it, could hear the beat in my head and see myself in it...so I guess that mean you had some tight imagry. Sounded real, like shit came from deep inside ya nah mean?

If you have time peep my audio collab with UnderRated in 'Songs' forum. Should be close to the top. Thanks man