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[Behind The Words]
Explaining the meaning "behind the words"
Taking your mind to extraterrestrial worlds... Examining the terms n' the explanations... Showin' that Rap is livin' up to all expectations... Behind the words tryin' to understand what it means... Growin' up in the 'surbs, Visions of street dreams... Visons of prosperity but we know dreams entity... We're stuck in this enmity illusion eternally... The comlpex structure is surreal but plain to see... The lyrics are artifical but seem real to me... Is it insane? or are my brain pulses just feign... Each word is a sword n' I can feel the pain... One swing, One lyric n' I pretend i didn't hear it... My mentality teaches me to keep torment a secret... A stab wound inflicted by a fatal Rhytmical diss... n' I still wonder If the truth behind the words - Really Exists??... Explaining the meaning "behind the words" Taking your mind to extraterrestrial worlds... Examining the terms n' the explanations... Showin' that Rap is livin' up to all expectations... |
yo homie...that was sum dope ass shit man, luved the vocab,wordplay n rhyme scheme...evrything was strait up fire, aint no flaw it this shit..its all dope..lookin forward to seein ur comin soon open mics
Peace please return de favor http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=111182 |
Open Mic is one hell of a slept on forum.
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read my post above.
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Good shit here...Very good flow in this piece, as well as excellent vocab...I liked the subject you portrayed and all your bars had unity and coherence, unlike most of these Open Mic'ers...what more can I say? 7.5/10...Your one of my favorite Open Mic'ers.
Please return the favour...mine is getting slept on. http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...637#post1147637 |
replies....this forum is slept on way too much...really should reinstate the 3 replies before you post rule again.
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very short and very sweet~~~...this was dope...and I agree with going back to 3reply rule...lot of good material do get slept on here...good work RT..peace..
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This wasnt a bad piece content wise .. the vocab was straight and it was told pretty well but you really need to get down multi's and internals to spark your pieces up a little. As a reader, i found myself losing interest after the opening four or so lines due to the basic one-syllable rhyming man, you need to work on that a little .. it'll bring a lot more to your pieces once you get those down. The transition was straight, you carried the piece well i thought - short, but to the point.
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NEARLY FLAWLESS FLOW IN THIS PEICE,
THIS WOULD MAKE A GOOD AUDIO. VOCAB WAS ALSO REALLY GOOD, HAD SOME DECENT WORDPLAY. GOOD SPIT OVER ALL. 8/10 FAVE LINE = Visons of prosperity but we know dreams entity... We're stuck in this enmity illusion eternally... GOOD MULTIES :-) PLEASE PLEASE RETURN THE FAVOUR, I'M SICK OF WAITIN FOR VOTES,(UNDER SIG) |
I agree Open Mic is getting slep on way too much! A lot of good shit goes by unnoticed....And this was good shit no doubt! straight to the point on this an very good.....I love the conplexity an inner meaning behind it....truly felt it....great read! I agree people shouldnt sleep good material like this out!
Check Out My Latest: I Bought Her Flowers Today http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=111616 |
^hitten it up now...^
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