double-0 seven vs whitelightning (Topical, 2nd Half Of Slips)
Topic: Ease The Pain (SS topic)
Lines: 30 Max Due: Thursday, Febuary 5th No Crew No Hate No D/R Good Luck. |
checkin in....good luck...this should be fun....
150 posts for people to vote...yadda yadda yadda |
well here i am pitted against the best topical wrier on the site!!!
if i win, i will be letting bruklor ban ur name, brcause you love him!!! |
Every Single Day, A Brand New Adventure
Wish It Was Pretend, These Issues Never Censored Never An Easy Journey, A Continous Strife Imagine Having No Control, Not Even With Your Own Life Every Step I Take, Is As Risky As The Next Where Will It Take Me? Don't Know What To Expect Broken With Every Way, Physically Even Mentally Running Out Of Options, The Cold Hard Reality Thoughts Movin' Rampant, Lay On, The Heated Floor Pop So Many Drugs, My Body Can't Take Anymore Start Convulsin And Shakin', Can Feel The End In Sight I Chickened Out, I Forfeited The Fight Goin' To Hell, The Place For This Kind Of Escape Thought It Through, I Knew My Ill Born Fate Was Kvorkeinfluenced, Popped And Experienced Fantasia It All Made Sense, The Step Of Euthinasia Just Felt So Helpless, No Goals Or Direction Why Would They Care, About My Personal Infection The Pain Is Dissapointing, My Cells Going Numb Begin To Ponder, Wasn't This Dumb? My Families Loss, Was My Sufficient Gain I Did What I Had To, To Ease The Pain |
sorry, for being late, i had work, an college, im just gonna have to key it up now!!!
my wifes left, the kids look at me no more, jobs gone, damn!!! a love one lost... only to a fault of my own, a happly family.. converted to a broken home, a haven of peace was smashed, bad decisions, evil has struck..... with intricate precision.... an illusion created in my mind.. an easy escape, my soul offered to drugs.. my dignity to take, a nervous hand parts.. with the devils money, to a seedy man.... who's streetwize an cunning, thoughts fill my head, but the process is wrong, in my current state.. not at most mentally strong, a needle jabs my arm, herion spreads amongst veins, i lost control... feelings confused, mixed in my brain, body an sense all different... a incredible feeling, and after 1 dig of this.. my next step was steeling, trying... but... only wanting to fuel the habit, i never knew i already fell down the hole of the rabbit, each doasge taken, like being on the boarder of death, but its something i needed, because an empty was left, just trying to ease the pain.... but its only prolonged, a lost place in society.... ......on the streets is now where i belong...... well i tried!! peace |
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why such a pessimist 007?...u came pretty good.......
actually...u get my vote.. i think 007 came better here....even though u used the same concept... 007 used it much better...better imagery, and seemed well thought out even though u claim u keyed... lightning came kinda weak....nothin really stood out...just plain use of the concept... so overall 007 came good..u came better here than in the battle part.. cuz i voted on that too.... no hate..just vote for the slept on...peace |
Good topical battle.
White--I liked your details describing the emotion same structure as 007, and flow.some good vocab and nice mukties very good piece...I liked it a lot. 007- good piece..some nice details and imagery but not as consistant..I didnt really enjoy the end. Over all I think this was extreamly close but WL just edged this with a more gripping verse. Good topical battle though...peace |
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drop a vote whitelightning will return any links drpeeed |
fuckin vote you sleeping fuckers..this is ridiculous..this battle has been goin for over 3 weeks....VOTE!!!
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well this was another good topical and its hard to judge cause both hit the topic so well. both had good structure and the flow was good on both. WL had the better wordplay and metas but 007 used nice words also. it seemed like 007 branched off into different parts of the subject which was good but WL made it all work with one subject. good piece from both but my vote goes to WL cause he hit the topic a little more.
VOTE_WHITELIGHTNING open battles http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=113861 |
Shit..dope versus by both...Ima have to give this to White Lightning by the narrowest of margins....Wl's verse jus seemd to hit me with more feeling than 007s...good use of multis and vocab...also was creative and original
007..you also had good vocab and were pretty original...but I dun think you quite had enough to top Wl's verse...stilla very dope verse... Win=WL Please drop an honest vote here guys..thanks a lot http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=114158 |
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