troble mc......(it pretty gud)
 

yeah here we go aint dropped some shit in a while so here it goes

i started rappin from a young age
i started rappin bout my dads rage
he would punch my mom right in the nose,
sometimes he hit her so hard i looked like her whole face would explode
it was in my raps wen my feellings were shown
my whole life was like a soap oprea episode
that you see on t.v
then that turned me into a troubled mc
i live wit my mom,
but i sometimes see my dad but wen i see his face it makes me mad
thinkin bout all those things he did to my mom
thats why im here droppin this bomb
sum ppl mite think of me as mc sadam
minus the hussain
ya think im insane
cut open my head and look at my brain
and see all the shit ive been thru
ya mite think its a lie
but beleive me its true
hope ya'll neva have to go thru that crap
and heres the end of this rap

4got 2 ut this at da bottom of my piece

''wot ya think reply a let us no''

this was wack as fuck!!!!!!!!your flow is elementry!

^^^i would have to agree...flow was choppy...
weak in all other aspects...

this shit was wack as fuck...

Keep Spittin...you can only get better...

Elevate...

Yeah you need to elevate....try evening up your lines a bit, to help the flow out....you need to up your vocab....try adding some multies to your next piece to make it more complex....you had the right idea about writing how you felt, but you just need to word up a bit different and make it more complex...but you will get there...keep at it.

yere i agree it waz alright