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The Darker Side of Love: A collab by Diverse and Speek E.Z.
Chorus:2x
Escape to a place where I dream awake Only to fall back asleep to watch my heart break Can't believe something like this even occured Happiness, reality, now even that line is blurred Speek E.Z. I Was Not Looking For Love Until One Day It Came To My Door.. Reading And Studying, Until Cupid Enriched My State Of Love From Poor.. Opened The Door, And My Eyes Just Seemed Shocked At This Vixen.. Haven't Seen Her Since High School, And It Didn't Take Me Long To Figure Out What I Was Missing.. She Just Smiled And Said, "Remember Me?" My Eyes Started To Glow.. Obvious That My Sleeves Were Rolled Up Cuz My Heart Was To Show.. But I Wanted To Know, What Were Her Exact Intentions Of This Visit.. Because If She Told Me When She Entered I Obviously Missed It.. I'd Say She Looked Exquisite, But For Her That Wouldn't Be A Compliment.. More Like A God Send, A Fallen Angel, I Think That's What Is Better Meant.. My Heart Was Asking, To Try To Touch Heaven By Just Feeling Her Fair Skin.. Just As I Reached Out, Everything Vanished, I Looked Around At My Surrounds, Just To Realize I Fell Asleep Studying.. Chorus:2x Escape to a place where I dream awake Only to fall back asleep to watch my heart break Can't believe something like this even occured Happiness, reality, now even that line is blurred Diverse Awake and in shambles, accepting loss for my own heart i've gambled Graciously I gave it to you, but you returned it to me trampled Caught glimpse of your beautiful exterior, covering your dark inner self Giving you everything I have, while you were giving it to someone else Tasting salty tears, chasing infinite pain away with bottomless beers Swallowing my hurt and pride while owning up to my greatest fears How could you? Why would you? Take advantage of my truest feelings Simple apologies could never make up for the pain with which i'm dealing Heartless monster, stab me in the back, causing unmendable injury All the while, maintaining a smile, to make me believe your still into me The rules of trust now broken, while i'm choking on every word i speak So hard to stand strong and maintain, when your voice still makes me weak Eventually all pain dissipates, dispersed through every single tear i weep Love isn't everything it's cracked up to be, so I'm going back to sleep....... Chorus:2x Escape to a place where I dream awake Only to fall back asleep to watch my heart break Can't believe something like this even occured Happiness, reality, now even that line is blurred |
speek, liked the twist at the end, really finished up nicely.... thought the flow was knocked a bit by the syllables in places, but enjoyed the read.. wasnt expecting the end... ya scheme was decent aswell, and the execution, wording, made it easy to follow.... Diverse, a different approach to the topic, but just as good... again thought there was slighly too many syllables,.... liked the way both ended, one waking up the other going to sleep.... a good collab here, both verses went well together, and i liked the hook.... keep at em
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I thought this was pretty nic. Nice flow from both. Nice descrition of feeling from both. It was an easy read. I just thought it was pretty nice, all together.
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^That was my fav part. It was ill. Keep up the good work fellas. Please drop feedback here: http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=111511 |
uppin for some more feedback, don't worry i'll be droppin feedback on ya'lls as well...........
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still uppin, man no feedback or what?
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uppin for feedback still.......................................
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yo archival was right...both very good flows....i was feeling diverse's alot more though cause i write poetry along wit songs...but yeah deffly some sick shit....
and i agree with archival sickest line was... diverse [Tasting salty tears, chasing infinite pain away with bottomless beers Swallowing my hurt and pride while owning up to my greatest fears] |
Dope collab
Good read Very enjoyable Showed high effection.. Some lines could have been worded better But yet, it all sounded good.... Props to ya both...... |
so many people have viewed this yet there is very little feedback..hmm
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Wicked
I Love your stuff I Read every drop with you name to it Much respect. If the rhythem is right Diverse be spittin it tight. |
thanks for the feedback, if anybody has shit they want looked at just drop a link...i love critiquing others verses and shit.
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this is a great piece... good twist at end of
first verse... I liked the way Diverse said goin back to sleepp that wus Ill... well written I don't really see anything to fix within' this OpenMic it's just perfect draws a good picture to what your talking about... overall i say a 9/10 but not penskillz good lol... yall dope keep at it... hit up the open mics in my sig CV:Reppin' and MAKE SURE that you Peep Satan's Contract |
This was a good collab...
Both were very different verses Speeks wasn't as deep as diverses But both were good..just different I liked tha twist at tha end of speeks...nice good piece.. |
both verses are equally dope. though they both had their own strong points.
the flow was great. the complexity was well enough and obviously the structure was well done. very nice. even the chorus stood out in this. you both seem to know wut ur doing. the meaning and heart in this was obviously felt. im sure we can all relate to some of this. keep at it peepz. pz |
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