Baz187 Vs Tenz
 

Check in dawg

Shit......
I push you up like a facelift
Face it, you aint never come close to me
The end is near i can almost taste it
Let my gat loose to spill ya brains on the pavement
Now thats a 187, baz they should call you 9 eleven
for Emergancy, your in danger of losin this battle
To dawg like me..................
Im misunderstud, but fuck it
My rhyme is almost up
Up in your ass so fast it cant even give you time to answer back
I got more plenty beef from vannesa felts ass crack
Than 10 of your dis's, man where you at!!!!

Dawg am here ... lets go ......yo.........
Dawg that verse was whack, You talkin about facelifts tat,
or are u talkin from your ass crack,
You definatley whack,
like vanessa on slim fast,
wouldn' last,
as hungry as me ,when i face another mc,
Im the Pimp you my bitch,
i know your starting to twitch,
time to face facts, u need a new career,
those weak rhymes are to fake to hear,
take your pre written shit n go back to the lab,
goin toe-to-toe with me, nigga i'll call u a cab.

Go n face Daffer22, whup his ass

That was a hot flow dawg i couldn't flip it

Lets Try this again, n i won't be kind,
this ones better, like your mum, i'll whup you behind,
I'll count to ten dawg, n blow ur flame out,
you call nine eleven now, ur ryhmes ain't nowt,
you jus jealous of my flow or should i say smitten,
tenz dawg, i know all of your flows are written,
vanilla ice spill the beans and rice,
this battles done, lets roll the dice,
you a one, im'a six, now its really time to spit,
now im sick of dissin you, n your bow wow shit,
you aint got no AK, so u ain't shoot nuthin,
now its about time u stop frontin....

Now lets not beat around the bush
Cuz Y'all know that Baz 187 is just an internet thug
Actin ruff, But when it boils down to it
You'll be quite on the hush
Dont push me dawg, Cuz i aint finished
I aint even started
I'll break you down peice by piece
Cuz 'nigga' you retarded
And what now.....
You a pimp, or is it gangsta
Thats all there is these days
Are these imatating pranksters
Didn't you ear 50
Well just for the record we'll call you the wanksta

i cant vote but your verses both need some pointers..

firts off both of u came with some played out bars..and tenz, shootin people lines are the weakest thngs u could drop..u guys need to add some vocab, punches(definatly), some sort of rhyme scheme(flow) and structure.
cuz ur verses were both pretty weak. u guys need to try and be more creative in fabricating orginal punches,etc..
i'm not tryin to diss u guys, just tryin 2 help u both improve..elevate

Here's how I see this.

Flow=Tie. Neither of your flows were well structured, which made them hard to read. I'm not even going to comment on the 2nd flow by Baz. Both of your flows were kind of messed up, work on this and it will make your over all drop better.

Punches=Tie again. You both had about the same number of punches and they both hit about as hard, which wasn't much. Both of you need to work on this as well, a good punch can win you a battle.

Personals=Tenz, I'm giving this to him because I didn't really see any personals from Baz until his second drop which doesn't count. Once again, both of you work on this and it will really improve your drops.

Vocab=Tie again. Both of you used pretty basic vocab, a few well chosen pieces of vocab can really make any drop better. Again work on that and it should help both of you elevate.

Ove all=Tenz, your piece hit a little bit harder, you still need to get to work on your flow and developing your punches and personals and vocab, if you can do this I think you will improve greatly.
Baz, you need to work on all of that stuff as well, but also realize that most of the people on this site think feeding off of the other persons verse is bitch to do, come up with stuff from your own brain and it will be a much better piece, other than that just keep working on other stuff, your second drop had a much better flow and I probably would have given you the win off of that but it was dropped to late.

Vote=Tenz