MCrepresenta vs. Machavelli
 

yo 6 bars
no crew votes no nuttin like at
you gots 20 mins to spit
yo n i can tell if you prewrote da shit too
hit me up
yall can spit first yo

you tell me you can spit, you tell me your the manne/
but after i get through with you'll be in contant paine/
i ain't messin' around if you think i am, get to walkin'/
even though you lost you just keep on talkin'/
you cant kill me my shit is to deep// wacth out in your
home us mother fuckers gon' trap you in your sleep//
down on your knees! if you can pleed ain't gon' matter/
12 gage shotty and make the blood splatter//
i'll kill you with the same song//
if you think your gonna beat then your DEAD WRONG!!//
and when its on its gonn be somethin you don't wanna see/
i'll trap you in this battle so you won't be FREE!!//

look at this corny mutha fucka tryna use the words of biggie
after i destroy you at this ima take ova ya city
its makaveli lil bitch learn how to spell the great ones name
if he saw ur lil battle hed say your ashame to this game
nigga i can take bullets i can take knives all up in my face
but my tommy gun n my techs will deffinately put u in ya place
can you taste that? its the blood on ya hand
take you out far away n bury ya ass in the sand
12 gage shotty? whachu know about those guns?
well they spray n they're powerful! so ima use it son
ill leave u n ya crew stranded in da MC bodybag
n then maybe youll realize you shouldn't a fucked wit me fag!

UPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNN the battle

MCrepresenta takes dis jst.Machavelli week puches.both not bad for newb's.flow and sturcture goes to MCrepresenta to.#
v/MCrepresenta(simply all round beta.
kepp it up both of u's

man this guy can't spit tellin me bull start the voting!!

Ok
honestly.....???
I think they are both newbish and both could use work.
However that doesn't mean I didn't like it

I'll do it text book

Machaveli

open: 3
(work on)

close: 3
(kinda frail work on)

personals: 0
(def. workon)
metas: needs work
punches: needs work
multis: 7
(they were there just up'em a lil)

also try to fix up your stucture a lil
even you lines out
Keep back rawer next time!
Props


MCrepresenta

open: 6
(nice )

close: 2
(was a lil dissappointed after the opener)

personals: 2
(neither of you really took (personal) shots out at eachother )
metas: needs work

punches: 2
multis: 6

Also MC nice structure


win:MCrepresenta
(I can NOT officially vote so no whining, jk)
personal opinion;


based on most of that

Flow - MC, was structured better, which made it flow and sound better to me

Punches -, some were played by both cats or lacking


Multies - Obviously MC, by his type of rhyme scheme, his rhyme scheme almost always guarantees him flow and multies. If your a newb take a close look and you'll see.

Vocab - Both were lacking on this

Overall they were alright verses

Keep elevating as ALWAYS

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JamesJr.