dazasta vs RB.com's father
 

*sigh* another sonning eh?
no hate votes
no d/r votes
fully explained votes
14 lines...?
NO biting
NO feeding
NO prewriting
Wanna go first? doesnt matter your choice...
drop 30 mins after check in

*sigh*waiting for check in..

no feeding kid...im cheggin in

i odnt need to feed...you going first or not?......

Don't try to defend it, I always rear end kids..
I'd love you to merk my ass, but this aint tennis
Your text sounds depressed *sigh* it wont last
Cuz RB.com's Father will *sigh*bur son your ass!
This battle is your end, I straight a-vent fools...
Even your crew will V.O.T. ... E against you!
You'd try flip my WORDPLAY concepts, thaz word
But sadly only reduce it to fucking PLAYEDWORDS!
Ya name sound gangsta in english, but start 'fessin..
But like ya life....
It only says 'thats after' in a dutch accent!
Feed YOUR verse?, I'll tell you something blatent
I'd feed off your career and still die of starvation
Fuck this battle, I could win with a no show...
You are a good head...with those fucking lowblows

shit i thought checking in automatically means im gunna spit...oh well

*sigh* as i thought....

There's no point in me trying...you'd probably win..sike..
the father?..i must be great grandaddy..chuz i just sonned you twice..
i guess it wasnt right...to try and show you up...
and of course you declare illness...your verse had me throwing up...
i know its tough...to try to get the hang dude...
but ur in desperate need of elevation..just like...fallen angels...
its the same dude..who tries to defend his cause...
sorry to tell you dad..your late..like menopause...
to prevent your fall...skill?..is what you lack...
proven fag...gives handjobs when i tell him to hit the sack..
just quit rap...toss you like a used pencil...
loyalty to you? shit even se7en didnt defend you...
guess i'll end you..shame i shoulda went first..
then you'd have a chance to win...if you quoted my whole verse...

Done..............

vote now..
and if u think ur cool with the whole sonned shit...ur kinda slow

you can all vote now..............................uppin 1

shut the fuck up kid...you lost..now.....hush and let people vote

sorry i don't have 100 votes to post officially but i think dazasta took this one nice punches and it flowed well and was an easy read, RB it was a little confusing but i like the closer and the dutch accent line decent flow and some ok punches but i'd say dazasta won this one by a hair.
return the favor:
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...264#post1154264

thanx for the feedback anyway..any votes?.....on this battle?

yup sure....big egos usually mean small penis's...but not like i care

Father
Your opener was horrible..
After that it got slightly better but just..slightly.
You had some ok wordplay, but tried to point it out to much..
Some didnt really work well..
Also some of ur attempts at personals? no..
You had some ok punches & thats it, basically.
Expected much more from somewhere with such an loose jaw.
..Overall ok.

Dazasta
Started of pretty good, but got slightly worse..
What basically did it for you, where the comedic punches..
The funny lines that just made more of an impact, then
Fathers attempts at personals..
Overall u just had the slightly better verse..
& im pointin out punches as the main factor for my vote,
I felt you had the upper hand in them..
& since this is a battle, u get my vote.

Dazasta

0~2.....making dazasta feel special since..umm today

0~1 my B