Valentines Is more Than a Day
 

I have feelings, Stuck inside me like The Rising Population
I don't how to let them out, Or even Drop a decent Interpretation
You never gave up on me, Even when I had seem to lose my Force
You Pushed me Forward, When My Legs no longer gave on Support
Your Amazing, The words that can't describe, How You Really Seem
A Picture's Worth A thousand Words, But Your Words are infinite To Me
Im hoping You Really Read This, And Discover That I do Really Love
Words Can't Describe All The Feelings, I'm Really Thinking Of..
Look in a Dictionary, Thesaurus, And I Still Won't Find The Right Things
I'd Buy You a Ring, And Show You Gratitude, For The Happiness You Bring
I look in the Mirror, But I can't See how Beauty Could Really Love Me
Im Just a Scrappy Kid from the Bronx, While'st You define all terms of Lovely
If there was a way I could Completely write My Thoughts, You know I would
I try to treat You Right, But I try too Hard, And I don't Treat You like I should

So On Valentines, Im giving myself to You, To show You My Gratitude..
Your Attitude has always amazed me, And Thats What I love about You
Im making up all the mistakes I made, Getting Up after All Of My Falls..
I'll pay for The check..Since I haven't filled My bill, As Far as I can Recall
I don't have the money, But I'm feeling above wealthy In Love..
I'm Dreaming Of, All the dreams Fulfilled With You..
Look At What Cupid's Arrow Really Does..
February 14th, 2003
The Night..When The Bullet Struck You, And The Cupids Arrow Struck Me...

damn...last line hit deep...nice suprise ending...dope flow...nice vocab...nice scheme....sick piece...hope to see more

Thanky You

Hmmm~~~nice work skiddz~~~~although V-day is still days away..this piece made me reailze I need to do something special for my girl..this was very very~nice~~~I like stuff like this...^^

Muchos Gracias Senor..
I do it for the Fans!!

I really like your style. everyone puts so much emphasis on exceeding internal rhyming and multies and sex with gophers and riding in golf carts so that you can be cooler than the kids with no format. but you kinda disrehard all of that and just flow on your own. I've always thought your bars were a bit long though.

As for the content....I was thinking "this is a stupid cheesy love piece. fucka love" and then I cought the ending. I was quite happy with that. You had a "pictures worth a thousand words" line. Everyone has those, shie away from them, cause you might bite without even knowing it. It's ridiculous. You had a fairly decent flow, and some nice wordplay in there. Your writers voice was pretty good too, if cheesy.

Good work =)