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Edicius Ft. Rhytmictendecies - Insecure rhymes
RhytmicTendicies:
Superficial ability connected with artificial capability... These rhymes lack versatility, with scare consistently... Invisibility – my rhymes are observed as see-through... If only you knew, that these words are insolently true... I try to decipher n’ construe, but my mind returns empty... A deep journey to find a intellectual meaning – if any... Retirement a luxurious prospect, am I done just yet...? Try to block out failed Rhythmical memories & forget... A new project? I look deep into my metaphoric mirror & reflect... Verse’s I thought were perfect n’ a futile original subject... However the prospect of fame is keepin’ me firmly in the game... The flame is burning out, & my exhausted brain gets the blame... We all struggle sometime, the confusing grows big yet we dont give up.. out strength will guide us thru..we will never stop.. Edicius: I write my struggles down,yet sometimes i struggle to write.. than it all seems a little useless..some time.. & my hate starts to ignite.. Its like i walk on this path, w/ pictures sliding of my wrath.. & im noticing darkness invaded.. And the question keeps growing bigger.. 'what did me persuaded'..? yet the answer to that,is maybe revailed in my own depth.. only im just a fool to comply.. & only see the small ammount that is left.. So i guess i just continue,..at doing 'what i think' ..i do best.. Revailing small pieces of my life..w/ emotions.. & this pain in my chest.. |
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This was a good piece from both of you... Good Vocabulary... Creativity was there... Pretty good topic... You both portrayed it well... And in different ways each... Good Had good imagery in this... Can picture in my mind what a think your trying to get across... Nice... Keep it up... Check the OM in my sig... Drop some feedback... Thanks... Pz |
1 reply...you gotta be playin' me.
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My bad there... Here goes... Read the above post... Im not writing that out again... Rythmic... You had the nicer vocab on this... Wordplay aswell... Both had nice structures... Both kept it consistent through-out... Two different views of the topic... Both views where nice... Imagery was decent from both... Nice topic... Was unusual to me... Now hit up my OM's... Thanks... Pz... |
This was pretty decent. Didn't like the rhymes in the first two lines but it was prett cool after that. Edd, ya structure through me off for a sec, but one i got it, it was cool. I thought you verse was pretty nice, aswell. Nice collabo fellas.
My fav lines: yet the answer to that,is maybe revailed in my own depth.. only im just a fool to comply.. & only see the small ammount that is left.. ^pretty ill....the next lines after this are ill too Please reurn the favor when you guys get a chance: http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=112020 |
WhOA
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Drop a comment on... 'The Sky'... Please...
You give good breakdowns... Thanks... Pz... |
Major sleepiness.
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good peice by both. had sum complexity in both. i enjoyed reading pretty much all of it. nice flow to'em both. sum lines culd be a little fixed up. the rhyming was difficult
to follow at times. but it was overall nicely done. keep at it. peace |
hit this up if you can in return please.
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...d.php?p=1162082 thanx |
Uppin' again....
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this is exactly the reason i'm giving up writin'.
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This was a very good Open Mic and both of you had extreme vocab......I liked reading this stuff. You guys should all do a collab with Penskills. :)
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