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snakeyes 02-04-04 04:19 PM

blitzkrieg under seige
 
hell has no fury, sentenced to damnation by a crooked jury/
got replied like a slap by sensational cherri, its scary/
to face the fact that i be wack and whoppers taste better dan big macs/
but dat don't affect me one bit, all yall are seeds in a weed sack/
got to take you out one by one then plant & stack all da shit u said back/
see i attack like a white shark, one drop of blood to lit up da spark/
engage in a battle is the way this snake rattles as i ride high on my saddle/
throwin pumpkin pies as i begin to realize this is just a website, shake da dice/
what you get...snakeyes on the front page of the l.a times givin you da.../
goodtimes and i'm out with a short, not to dope but shit dat cut yo throat/
rymes/

Xey 02-04-04 10:46 PM

I like your word play in this thread and sharades. Ummm i don't want to sound like EVERY other post i have read but your lines do need to be evened out... if a song style is what you're looking for. I'm really diggin sharades though =P too bad the thread was closed. This one was a little weaker than what i had hoped for, but every page isn't going to be a platinum hit. Personall i'd change up the pumpkin pie line, it just didn't fit witrh the tone of the rest of your work. Lines 5 and 6 were good, work em up a little more though. And i'm glad you see the truth.


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