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duhble-u 02-04-04 10:30 PM

flexing tha brain
 
its so simple, how rappers with no credentials
could cause ripples in an industry thats lyrical
they find spirituals but turn back to their pistols
eliminate guns and their songs would be instrumentals
if you write mental your position remains pivotal
but still theres only so much quality shit to listen to
your mission to, write song entitled "Missing You"
has still to do with you just producing sales
i got more rhymes than a fish has scales
my lyrical weight has me wrestling with whales
seeing me in light is why moles lose sight
afraid that i might say something like..............
i spit so quick average people lose track
we didnt battle, i just let you fight back
i travel faster on curves than straight lines
wearing watches on my ankle to never run out of time
take a nap and drown you so you can sleep with the fishes
my lyric elements are worth more than seven wishes
you know i can roast you or how hot i can get
i can have a barbecue on the sun and not break a sweat
i recite the reasons, thats Duhble-u's thesis
coveying complicated ideas without speaking
without breathing, living longer than any man put to rest
....................................then ill take my second breath.

Graphic_Content 02-05-04 12:43 AM

That Was Hot SOn, Ide think you was a VEt here or somethin. I really like dat shyt about

its so simple, how rappers with no credentials
could cause ripples in an industry thats lyrical
they find spirituals but turn back to their pistols
eliminate guns and their songs would be instrumentals
if you write mental your position remains pivotal
but still theres only so much quality shit to listen to
your mission to, write song entitled "Missing You"



THAT SHYT WAS HOT. Keep Droppin

Holmes Jr. 02-05-04 12:54 AM

This was not bad for a first piece espeically the first few lines but you need to elevate man, pick a topic other than i can spit better than anyone, and get a better structure to your song, throw in multi's and meta's and whatnot and really elevate your vocab to keep it consistent cos you seemed pretty strong in the first few bars then it just dropped like what..5/10


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