Veteran Dream
 

Bullets passin, blastin my enemy as we get blasted back,
This could be our last attack, and thats a drastic fact,
I leave a massive crack on this fucking germans face,
They've got weapons but we're a determined race,
Got hit with a fist, but it seems the body dont even exist,
Make the fist my souveneer, but I'll be leavin the wrist,
I wish I was dead, but I gotta fight too keep my pride,
I creep inside the enemy layer go deep and wide,
Takin hostage, Im gonna die and that means a broken promise,
I really mean too keep like all of my options open, honest,
Im sweatin, Never forgettin the feelin of my body gettin tense,
Im bettin Ill let em beat me, cause pain is my second sense,
I aint gonna fight back, If I move position my back might crack,
Gettin outta this alive is like being able to conjure white crap,
When I awoke the first thing I did was look for crap the slightest bit,
The sight is sick, But at now I can say too people your white as shit.....

good lil verse there, nice flow to it
lines were consistant.vocab was good, could be a bit better
but all round good, keep it elevating


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good spit for a newbie, good flow and wordin. keep it up!!