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that's life pt1: trues stories told through lyrics
people say that the youth of today/
got it good in every and any perspective manner and way/ they say that compared to their life we got it made easy/ i just sit back laugh and look at these fucks like they're crazy/ cause ya'll have absolutely no idea how are life realy is/ ya'll looked down on 19 year kim with a 3 year kid/ ya'll called her a slut and slut but know half of the story/ ya'll got an image of her as that trick on yesterdays maury/ so let me tell you what happened how she got pregnant with her daughter/ it all started with the absence of her mother and alchoholic father/ whenever he bothered to get some juice inside of his system/ he would go and molest her and her younger sister/ she was ten and realized her house wasn't a place for a child/ so she packed some of her clothes and ran for 20 miles/ she got to her aunts house worn out and filled with tears/ her aunt told her that she could stay for a few years/ until the day her aunt died straight flat on her back/ because of her addiction for sex and dangerous habbit with crack/ kim was a young girl now tryin to survie on her own/ with nobody to help her except for some buged out cusins at home/ no money in her pockets and no food for her to eat/ so she dropped out of school and sold her body on the street/ then it happened one day a customer busted a rubber/ now she's not know as a growin girl she's know as a young mother/ when people are forced to do things that no one would like/ we must must al realized that that's just life/ when things are fucked up and we just wanna make it right/ when worst comes to worst just know that's life/ |
the actual story element was decent, ive seen similar pieces... but the execution, the scheme you used was too basic, there was some nice imagery, but would have been much better with some internals and more complex rhyming.........all in all not bad...... hit mine...
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Alright, flow needs a little work. ex:
"she got to her aunts house worn out and filled with tears/ her told her she could stay for a few years/" liked this line: "then it happened one day a customer busted a rubber/ now she's not know as a growin girl she's know as a young mother/" Overall 6/10 |
aiyo i'm steady gettn slept on ya'll need to reply aight...........................holla atcha boy gun
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WAKE THE FUCK UP!!!! quit fuckin sleepin on me god damn
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man this shits sick, you got flow, keep spittin your shit
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aiyo good lookin to those who replied and fuck ya'll who've been peepin and not replyin wake the fuck up
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Hmmm..I actually kind of thought this was decent..first your flow was okay..all though I agree with my friend Dev(he's really GAY~)this was very simple and simplicity did work for you but,if you added more internals and if it was a bit more complex..this would be a dopey...anyway..this was decent..and don't worry so much about people not replying it'll happen...I had stuff over with 400views and only 30replys...peace...~click on my sig....II....^.^
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yo this shit is really eggin me on nobody replies anymore on this site this mess is straight up garbage fuck ya'll
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the fuck is the matter with ya'll stop sleepin god damn
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still uppin
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Hi*:)
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you stupid fuck you are most likely getting banned
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:) probaly won't :) |
i'm only sayin that cause you freepostin numbnuts
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