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LadyWun 02-06-04 04:19 PM

When Things Happen
 
You will never know what you once were to me
I saw you as my savior, I though you set me free
But now we're through
So I'll do what I must do
It's my time to hurt, to let tears heal my soul
Release all my pain and let it takes its toll
Men come and go and they always will
But your imprint was large and is with me still
Nothing has killed me yet, I'm stronger every day
I will never let you smother me in every single way
Now I'm going to breathe, I walk by myself
No more will my heart be upon your empty shelf
No more will I let you put me down
I will never again let you throw me around
Love is so blind everyone told me so
All that time wasted with nothing to show
Now that I move on I can change it all
Wiser from the past, I will stand tall

LadyWun 02-06-04 10:29 PM

whats a matter no one got nothing to say lol... peace

shawty"B" 02-07-04 02:37 PM

this peice is reel gud, i think its reel and tru. the fact that it just stands out in a girls mind just gives way to imagery from past relationships. this is reel nice keep droppin

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Love is so blind everyone told me so
All that time wasted with nothing to show
Now that I move on I can change it all
Wiser from the past, I will stand tall

LadyWun 02-08-04 04:15 PM

thanx

filed 02-10-04 12:53 PM

ok this is a topic that gets done over and over again, and most of the time, they are all about the same. and even thou you used some phrases in your piece that you see alot, you still put in some unique stuff, and made it fairly interesting.emotion was strong, but could use alot more detail when trying to describe us something, use all your senses.structure and rhyme scheme were basic, but rhyming didnt come off forced, did over do it. vocab was simple, can always up that some. it was a nice read.

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