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Front Lines Vs Open Mic
Front Lines...
Crunching blows to be delivered.. Painful to the opponent each time But no-one is really physically hurt... ... Its just a victimless crime Reputations are gathered.. But then reputations are also shattered Ego's bruised and battered... ... Battlers minds left scattered Battle scars are shown.. But they're displayed in record form How many people you sonned... ... And how many times you got verbally torn Attempting to bring Armageddon.. Combatants spit in conflict Trying to look half-assed... ... At the same tryin not to get ripped But really im wondering.. Why do we bother to battle at all There's always gona be someone better... ... Thats why we have roll call Open Mic... Metholigical syllables.. Tightly compact into a solid verse Here its mind over matter... ... Its where vocabulary is dispersed Elaborations of thought.. Minds wondered through like a valley Open Mic is a haven... ... No records, not even a tally Mystical interpretations.. Ambiguous mind flows to picture But this is truly the place... ... Where writers take the real stricture Creative minds.. Seeking to outlet their thoughts constructively Some people prefer solo work... ... While others work together productively Philosophical brains.. Seeking answers to questions never requested Open Mic is the place to be... ... Where you will truly get tested |
This was Dope...great concept...great scheme...within just few days you have killed the OM's...I would put this up in 'Legends'..but...you haven't been here long enough...LMAO.....^.^....
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Oh my fuckin god. Did you write both verses? Seems like two different people. When i read the first i was about to tell you that this piece wasnt one of your best and couldnt stand up to the last one you did. Then i read the second verse, and almost every line was quotable. Nice job. This was worth the read. Keep up the good work.
Please drop feedback here: http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=112603 Another thing, did you make the 1st verse weaker on purpose? *waits for reply* |
iight...
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Thanks man... No harm in trying for Legends... :)... Lol... Go ahead if you think its good enough... Quote:
Yes... A did both verses... Lol... Verse one is meant to have less vocabulary... Because Front Lines doesnt have much of that... Whereas Open Mic does... This was a joy to write... Thanks for the feedback... Keep it coming... Pz... |
Dayamn dawg this was an ill ass drop.....imagery was great an you really broke into the subject an dug up all the specs of it.......awesome flow an definatly worth the read.....this was a great piece keep it up!
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hmmm nicely done although i wasnt really feeling the topic, it had nice flow and u did everything dopely but somehow i didnt really enjor the topic,, i am awaiting more dope drops from u, so make sure you keep writing..............Peace
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good job
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Except from the content..
The style..Italic & the dots used in that way. Looks alot like my style. |
Never seen a piece from you...
Dont know who you are... Its my style... Used it for every OM... Its how a write them... Thanks for the feedback everyone... Pz... |
lol..its no one's style...nice drop though
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i thought this had some decent content, the second verse was better, but i think the flow was choppy as hell....wasnt the easiest read, but away from that... decent drop.... i jus prefer sumthin easier.... but still you got alot into it... and it was quite interesting so....
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Very well done...another well done executed om...I thought this had some truth in it...with the reality of the concept...a very good flow...nice vocab and so on...but the thing that grasped me was how you compared front lines to open mic...I thought that was creative...I thought open mic would've been compared to PS or something...but all in al...great piece again lol....keep up the good work
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Thanks for all the comments...
Keep em coming... To the top with you... Pz... |
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Once again^ |
another nice piece. keep it up . blap!!!!! i'll break it down l8r prb 2nite!!
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