TIMELESS VS zikio version 2
 

10-12 Lines
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Due In 30 Minz
No Hate Votes Etc..

when u come face to face wit my colt its gon do more than chip
the damage is something that cant be conprehended
Im like a navy seal Im just searching
when I see a whack ass rapper there I am and Im lurking
coming against me is ur ultimate mistake
its a an error for which u shall pay
u say that 4-0 record
well prepare to get a 1 on the loss and a ride on the strecher
this battle may be good and it may lead too much perstiance
but the only thing this oak ridge rapper is gon' do is wipe ur existance

well I spit
good luck too u I hope u gimme a good battle
4-0 means u will

You call that shit a verse? and prewritten With a week to rehearse?
Ya need ta speak to a nurse. Cause blood about ta leak through ya shirt
I spontaneously come-bussin caps, wit Russian gats, that's crushing cats.
There MIGHT b a verse that can out-class me, but I guarantee, it wasn't that
you should lose on even ONE vote. Cause when I drop these ill rhymin lines
I guarantee~ya~see~a~loss, but judgin from ya spit, it will NOT be mine
rhymes that i spit are alot hotter than fire, and deeper than 6 oceans
it would b best if i kill ya in this battle, coz dead rappers get better promotion
this is a fairy tale for ya,hey cindarella its been good to know ya
so remember this little bitch just after 12 o'clock this battle woz over.

good job that was some good shit
I admit when my opponent is better I think u is but lets see wat the people think

aiight cant poll but iwill give my opinion............
Timeless u came abit weaker than i expected but it was stil strong.
u had good punches but a very poor flow it was Patchy......
Zikio u had no hard hitin punches at all, but ur flow was very smooth and iliked that...
but this battles goes to timeless he was better overall........
Vote..Timeless


Best line.......it would b best if i kill ya in this battle, coz dead rappers get better promotion.

Realy enjoied that line.......

zikio's verse

when u come face to face wit my colt its gon do more than chip
the damage is something that cant be conprehended
Weak weak weak opener, didnt even rhyme
Im like a navy seal Im just searching
when I see a whack ass rapper there I am and Im lurking
So your lurking where theres wack rappers... wack
coming against me is ur ultimate mistake
its a an error for which u shall pay
Filler, hardly rhymed
u say that 4-0 record
well prepare to get a 1 on the loss and a ride on the strecher
Sad attempt at a punch
this battle may be good and it may lead too much perstiance
but the only thing this oak ridge rapper is gon' do is wipe ur existance
this was the best line in the verse, ok atempt at a punch, but still wacky

Timeless Verse

You call that shit a verse? and prewritten With a week to rehearse?
Ya need ta speak to a nurse. Cause blood about ta leak through ya shirt
Ok opener, second line was filler
I spontaneously come-bussin caps, wit Russian gats, that's crushing cats.
There MIGHT b a verse that can out-class me, but I guarantee, it wasn't that
Nice wordplay, and a nice personal as well
you should lose on even ONE vote. Cause when I drop these ill rhymin lines
I guarantee~ya~see~a~loss, but judgin from ya spit, it will NOT be mine
Ok punch, not that hard hittin but ok
rhymes that i spit are alot hotter than fire, and deeper than 6 oceans
it would b best if i kill ya in this battle, coz dead rappers get better promotion
Very nice, first line had good metaphor, and was followed witta hard punch
this is a fairy tale for ya,hey cindarella its been good to know ya
so remember this little bitch just after 12 o'clock this battle woz over.
Alright closer, not the best but you already beat him anyways.

Zikio you had no real punches, and some of your shit didnt rhyme... You need to elevate alot before battlin someone like timeless again.

Timeless you hadda decent verse, hard hittin punches wit some personals and some nice wordplay, could still use elevatin, but hey, who couldnt. Good battle man.

Vote - Timeless

Sorry I cant poll.

If you could hit me up wit an honest vote Id appreciate it. Thanks.
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=112309
Pz.

v/ - Timeless because of harder hitting punches.

Personally, I thought both verses could use work and at most, were nothing above average. But that's waht rapbattles.com is for...to upgrade ya skills.
Anyways, zikio version 2 ...first of all, get a better name. 2nd, you had personals but your verse really lacked good punchlines. It was as if you wer just saying stuff, ad sum creativity in your verse to create better punchlines.

uppin............................................. ..

when u come face to face wit my colt its gon do more than chip
the damage is something that cant be conprehended
dun rhyme...no flow...played punch
Im like a navy seal Im just searching
when I see a whack ass rapper there I am and Im lurking
bad flow...weak punch
coming against me is ur ultimate mistake
its a an error for which u shall pay
no punch
u say that 4-0 record
well prepare to get a 1 on the loss and a ride on the strecher
blah
this battle may be good and it may lead too much perstiance
but the only thing this oak ridge rapper is gon' do is wipe ur existance
weak


You call that shit a verse? and prewritten With a week to rehearse?
Ya need ta speak to a nurse. Cause blood about ta leak through ya shirt
ok punches
I spontaneously come-bussin caps, wit Russian gats, that's crushing cats.
There MIGHT b a verse that can out-class me, but I guarantee, it wasn't that
1st line was whack..useless multis..second line ok
you should lose on even ONE vote. Cause when I drop these ill rhymin lines
I guarantee~ya~see~a~loss, but judgin from ya spit, it will NOT be mine
played
rhymes that i spit are alot hotter than fire, and deeper than 6 oceans
it would b best if i kill ya in this battle, coz dead rappers get better promotion
nice
this is a fairy tale for ya,hey cindarella its been good to know ya
so remember this little bitch just after 12 o'clock this battle woz over.
ehhplayed but ok

Z- Check whackness emergency center dawg ta get help with ya battles. You gotta come more creative in ya lines....Use less filler and try and rhyme ya words.
Timeless- good overall verse, you had some filler in ther but you had some nice lines too. Some of ya shit was a lil stretched, but ok.

Please drop an honest vote here guys. I took the time for you http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=112337

my bad wrong link http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=112459

Vote - Timeless

Basically he took every category. Z was insulting himself in his verse, did not rhyme half of the time, and had no real punches. Time takes punches, definitely multis, had a mutli every line with about 3 syllables. Z had only 1 syllable IF he rhymed, which he didn't even do. Nobody takes wordplay, none there. Personals, nobody had any. Liked the dead promotions line, liked the multis, flowed very well. Time, you need to add some wordplay from complexity, Z you need to rush to wackness hospital quickly, you are in critical condition. Z, don't insult yourself in your verse, stay focused, create some punches, wordplay, and mainly, rhyme.

Timeless-better punches, completly took
structure/and/flow other guys wuz whack
as shit... you came overall harder and better
Ive seen better form you... dont look like you
really tryed here... ya had more multis...
didnt see any from other guy, didnt see
personals form either of ya...

now for...
zikio-shiity punches not very good...
they were really weak and/or played
or you just had none... your metafors
just NO you really need to elevate
you have a horirble structure and flow
you need to work on everything....
flow/structure/multis/punches/metas/
personals/etc...<elevate all them

My Vote/TIMELESS...return tha favor wit honets votes on these battles...
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=110949
and the on in my sig Vs Assassin..
pz..._-SyaNidal-_...OUT

timeless def took this with a better overall verse.....you guys were a lil soft but overall timeless took it

punches you should lose on even ONE vote. Cause when I drop these ill rhymin lines
I guarantee~ya~see~a~loss, but judgin from ya spit, it will NOT be mine

that was probably the only aight line but aight battle overall

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