Brethren vs. CrazyE
 

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You drop first, I'll drop shortly after

Good luck

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I'm whipping something up quick

"Breath" stinks up this place , like a smelly fart in the food court
He could be spitting off da 1st Floor, but his words still fall short

You ain't got Shit ,No way in Hell you Come Correct
This Little Faggot , is about to get Train Wrecked

Let me Inter-Ject my Ill-thoughts and Feelings
I Spit Special Effects, Dat leaves ya Head Reeling

Your Nothing to me , and you can't Spit a Rythme/Beat
Imma Fuck you so Hard , you'll be walking with Crows Feet

You got balls challenging me , I must admit, but be warned
Custer had Balls too , when he got slayed, at Little BigHorn

Peace Out
CrazyE

Loopin a hint while CrazyE chose to battle a monster, like he was on halloucinogens,
You can rap 10 verses in 5 languages, but they still ain't 'fluent atempts',
I ruin amends, slam you till you get to a studio, and you'll be 'threw in a sense',
Have your truest of friends turn backwards on you, like they sense 'you in the bitch',
Grabbing my dick with a vice-grip is the only way you'd give a 'piece of advice',
You got feces to bite, drop 10 lines, I'll give you 10 reasons you shouldn't be keeping ya life,
I'll touch your words, say 'I hurt your feelings', after I crush your nerves,
Wax on, you got much to learn, this bitch is bubblegum, the way he's stuck to curbs,
Jinkies this dude is garbage, he's just a 'pup meddler', like Scooby Doo,
From Susie Q? Quick, you need to add a D to your name, like Cuba Goo-.


Sorry, internet went down

"Breath" stinks up this place , like a smelly fart in the food court
He could be spitting off da 1st Floor, but his words still fall short
whack set up and delivery
You ain't got Shit ,No way in Hell you Come Correct
This Little Faggot , is about to get Train Wrecked
weak..played
Let me Inter-Ject my Ill-thoughts and Feelings
I Spit Special Effects, Dat leaves ya Head Reeling
weak..no real punch
Your Nothing to me , and you can't Spit a Rythme/Beat
Imma Fuck you so Hard , you'll be walking with Crows Feet
what?
You got balls challenging me , I must admit, but be warned
Custer had Balls too , when he got slayed, at Little BigHorn
good meta


Loopin a hint while CrazyE chose to battle a monster, like he was on halloucinogens,
You can rap 10 verses in 5 languages, but they still ain't 'fluent atempts',
kinda stretched but nice
I ruin amends, slam you till you get to a studio, and you'll be 'threw in a sense',
Have your truest of friends turn backwards on you, like they sense 'you in the bitch',
kinda weak
Grabbing my dick with a vice-grip is the only way you'd give a 'piece of advice',
You got feces to bite, drop 10 lines, I'll give you 10 reasons you shouldn't be keeping ya life,
stretched again...ok..but kinda played
I'll touch your words, say 'I hurt your feelings', after I crush your nerves,
Wax on, you got much to learn, this bitch is bubblegum, the way he's stuck to curbs,
decent
Jinkies this dude is garbage, he's just a 'pup meddler', like Scooby Doo,
From Susie Q? Quick, you need to add a D to your name, like Cuba Goo-.
ehh kinda weak

Brethren wins this..he had harder and more creative personals and punches and metas. An overall good verse. CrazyE came with too many played lines and wasn't too original/creativie in his verse. Vote-Breth

Please drop an honest vote here guys...I took the time for yall. Thanks http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=112337

Ok This Is How It Went

Crazy E = Flow Was Ok And Also Structure. Punches Were A Lil Weak And Ya Had No Wordplay.

Brethren = Nice Flow Structure Was A Bit Off, Punches Were Ok And Also Had Some Personal. And You Had A Few Lines Ok Wordplay.

Close Battle

Flow = Tie
Structure= Crazy E
Punches=bre
Personal=bre
Wordplay=bre

Vote = Brethren

Flow = Brethren
Structure= Brethren
Punches=brethren
Personal=brethren
Wordplay=brethren

Crazy-> you didn't come hard enough. your punches didn't hit hard enough and your word play was invisible. you should keep writin' though, you'll get better.

Brethren-> Your flow was nice and you kept it going with some good hits dawg. You had some nice personals and you didn't do too bad with the wordplay

VOTE-> Brethren... just had the better verse this time around.

flow-tie
metas-brethren
originality-brethren
wordplay-brethren
punches brethren

Good battle crzE had a good opener but left everyone hangin and expectin a better verse and they didnt get that till we all read brethrens my vote goes to brethren your buildin a reputation quick good shit keep it up G

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I felt like Brethren had almost no flow whatsoever, and I did like Crazy's custer closer, so in a relatively close battle, I would vote voter for crazy if i could.
hit these up:
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=111280
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=110315

^^^ Sure

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very good battle
crazy good wordplay and nd flow
bretren ur first couple of lines were ill, as soon as i read them i made up my mind
good flow and punches
vote-brethren

peep this and leave links
vs Timeless
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...d.php?p=1166316

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this was a gud battle
flow: Brethren had more gud rhymes and wordplay than CrazyE, I also felt that he had a nicer, lets say, beat than Crazye
structure: There isn't much to say about the structure cuz they both had a gud one so...
Punchlines: brethren hads more punches than crazyE n they came harder so there wasn't much competition here, E you need to wotk on your punches and personals cuz Brethren had more personals goin on and you hadn't any so elevate on this man

overall vote: brethren

Uppin, both us have 5 more ups cuz this battle got re-opened

drop a vote please .

C - alot of played concepts.. punches were all stand-alone so it killed the flow.. ya vocab is ok but u jus need to come up wiv some fresh metas to make effective punches.. also try gettin more personal.. pick apart ya opponent.. ya verse was pretty general..

B - ya usin more complex vocab an metas but be careful not to knock ya flow off wiv stretched bars.. u need ta use less words to create ya punches cos they're losin their force by the time a sentence is complete.. nice creative finisher.. best line of the battle..

VoTe = Brethren

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