Brethren vs. Pitch Black
 

10 lines
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allright ill c ya back here in an hour u goin first ?

We both have to drop before 12:10, that's the due date, blind spits

here we go
 

I aint heard some weak shit like yours since first grade
But keep runnin your mouth let your throat meet my blade

Sorry, not but im trying to get paid I got 7 more lines just to try invade
U need some help with your lines maybe u should get an upgrade

I thought u were bringin it all of a sudden,, your afraid
Bitch your like a cockroach and im bringin the raid

I only let one fist drop u all ready needin first aid
Don’t worry ill slow it down for ya I got this shit made

F is what your getting when it comes to the grade
Home is where u came from and it where u should have stayed
:shoot:

I'll slash your bones, till calcium leaks out of marrow, like kidneys having stones,
No accidents, after I just call you out, people think you 'disaster prone',
Battle Me?! I walk on water and part seas, so your only choice is defeat,
I leave you with shit missing, like paraniod people over the toilet seat,
I'm heir to the lugar holder, while this bitch is just 'hair of the lugey', (LOL)
Got fortune tellers predicting this battle, the way this dude is scared of the future,
PiTcH Black, with all them capitals, were your hands shaking when you wrote?,
Dust off your verse, like for prints, while I cover it with 'baking soda for quotes',
Leave you with rope, like Wonderwoman, so nobody'll 'see that your dope', (damn)
Finish this battle like jacking off to orange juice, I beat you to pulp.

OK HERES HOW IT WENT

PITCH BLACK = GOOD FLOW AND STRUCTURE, BUT PUNCHES AND PERSONALS LACKED BIG TIME. VOCAB WERNT REALLY GOOD EITHER.

Brethren = ALSO GOOD FLOW, STUCTURE WAS A BIT PATCHY, YOU HAD BETTER PUNCHES AND PERSONALS. AND VOCAB WAS DECENT.

FLOW = BRE
STRUC = PITCH
PUNCHES = BRE
PERSONALS=BRE
VOCAB=BRE

VOTE BRE

CAN YA PLEASE RETURN THE FAVOUR ON THE BATTLE UNDER MY SIG THANKS.

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Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation. - Token

flow: Brethren had a better flow cuz his rhymes came nicer and pitch didn't had gud a wordplay and he didn't had a gud patern in his verse
punchlines: Brethren had more and better punches cuz they came harder than pitch and pitch you didn't have any gud punches, you also didn't have any personals when Brethren had several gud personals, Pitch you need to elevate man
structure: again Brethren takes this cuz Pitch hadn't a gud structure cuz I didn't felt his ritmn

overall vote: Brethren

vote on this thx a lot
www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=112900

pitch black had kept up with the basicness of his rhymes and his flow was better than brethren jus because it was shorter written. Bretren merked dis cat wickedly with his flows stopping all of pitch blacks nonsense in rhymes and weak attempt at punches. Bretren had an ass of hard hitting punches and shit that i wouldn't of even thought of probably which was good for creativity also, Bretren jus held his own and pitch black had no real chance of beating da hell out of dis experienced light weight in my opinion. Both of ya'll keep elevating and working on your weaknesses, but especially pitch black need to extremely elevate all your shit, no hate jus an honest vote.

vote= Brethren

Mentalist had a really bad flow dat wasn't good at all and where were da punches at on dis battle to say da least for mentalist's side? Mentalist had no punches but were poor attempts at throwing them at killa kid if you ask me. Killa kid wiped mentalist clean with his punches and metaphors dat played along with his wordplay in his verse which was pretty good. Da best line to me was da enema part shit made me laugh hard at mentalist's ass. Kid killa has came down on foes much doper than dis but still he was to good and skilled to be beaten by mentalist.

Vote= Killa Kid

*vote on my battles here, thanks*
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=112785
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=111414

dat killa kid vote got here because of my cpu making a mistake don't pay it any attention.........o.k.

Brethren had some good punches : PiTcH Black, with all them capitals, were your hands shaking when you wrote?,
Dust off your verse, like for prints, while I cover it with 'baking soda for quotes', dis is good and funny,, like it.....Brethren had good structure and kept line da same lenght witch i like....flow was prety elmentry tho....<work on it ok..
Pitch black ur verse was pretty week....very few punches witch hit.....struture was basic but da flow was ok......it was ok 4 a newb but u were out classed by ur oponent...
v/Brethren

v/ - It's safe to say that Brethren edged this out.

Why? Better punchlines, and they connected better because of his use of multies to enhance his flow. Frankly...i thought both verses were pretty weak, but Brethren's was just stronger and hit harder. The battle was like the top athlete in the school vs the average athlete...the average athlete comes out his best...but just because of raw ability...the top athlete wins.


Return the favour and vote honest on my battles plz. thx.

uppin for a final vote, this got re-opened so we both got 5 more ups

I aint heard some weak shit like yours since first grade
But keep runnin your mouth let your throat meet my blade
played...weak
Sorry, not but im trying to get paid I got 7 more lines just to try invade
U need some help with your lines maybe u should get an upgrade
whack
I thought u were bringin it all of a sudden,, your afraid
Bitch your like a cockroach and im bringin the raid
what? blah
I only let one fist drop u all ready needin first aid
Don’t worry ill slow it down for ya I got this shit made
no real p[unch
F is what your getting when it comes to the grade
Home is where u came from and it where u should have stayed
weak


I'll slash your bones, till calcium leaks out of marrow, like kidneys having stones,
No accidents, after I just call you out, people think you 'disaster prone',
decent
Battle Me?! I walk on water and part seas, so your only choice is defeat,
I leave you with shit missing, like paraniod people over the toilet seat,
ok
I'm heir to the lugar holder, while this bitch is just 'hair of the lugey', (LOL)
Got fortune tellers predicting this battle, the way this dude is scared of the future,
kinda weak
PiTcH Black, with all them capitals, were your hands shaking when you wrote?,
Dust off your verse, like for prints, while I cover it with 'baking soda for quotes',
ok
Leave you with rope, like Wonderwoman, so nobody'll 'see that your dope', (damn)
Finish this battle like jacking off to orange juice, I beat you to pulp.
ok

Brethren takes this easy...he actually thre some half decent punches...PB you need to be more creative...vote-Breth
PLease drop an honest vote here http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=113550