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Its some Questions untouched..now finally being risen and justly spoken.. Expressions become blushed..relax and let your mind barrier be broken.. Why is everything you hold tightly and claim..have its own signed release forms.. How come my om's are not on hall of fame..when I outshined and ceased swarms.. Birthdays? Why a celebration..when they are just an unplanned accident.. Why do we insist on collaboration..when all we want is 1man’d stacks to inflate.. Why say nothings impossible..when truth is the statement is highly improbable.. Because for nothing to be impossible..not being possible would be IMPOSSIBLE.. Why we reunite at a restaurant..when the conversation is about places we ate.. Why use Sex to flaunt..then at the end of the night..go home and masturbate.. Whys your girl have sight for you..when I seen her eyes wander my way.. Why is sadness portayed in blue..Is this true..or am I runnin off the highway.. Why do I start sentences with why..when vocabulary skill is obviously there.. In life I never find repentence..then in death I cry..Is my retrospect fair.. Can this be a stoner thought..reality brought..or just expressions to fill a void.. If two minds left alone fought..would words or physical shots be deployed.. Old age, why do we cling on to what we own..when all we have is lost.. Search for possessions is overblown..yet the best ones are without cost.... You know your perspectives would be stronger..if you didn’t miss it blinking.. I know you wish this was longer..I would rather stop and leave you thinking.. one more...I get no respect? from known writers..Yet I'm keep on writing.. My Open Mics are Legendary!!! Fuck What You Have To Say!!! ^.^ |
.........................................I find this extremely true..Can anyone on this damn site tell me why Penskills is not a legend?Speak now or forever hold your peice
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Hahahaahaha just what "they" deserved simple as that! Finally spoke out! We need to put an end to this dictatorshit!!!!!!!!!!
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This shit was ill. I loved the message. Many quotables. The last line was killer. You keep coming with the quality. Sooner or later, people with have to accnowledge(i can't spell, so quit teasing me, bitch!:( ) you. Keep doing what you do, homie.
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And ps. "Why use Sex to flaunt..then at the end of the night..go home and masturbate.." Buwahahahahahahahaha!!!
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^what was the point in posting twice, Arc, to get your post count up..?
Kinda contradicted yourself: "Put this shit in Legends BItch!! I don't give a fuck if I never get in!!!" --[Flow]--- Flow was nice, had some dope internals, and the rhymes were full of complexity n' deepful meaning, not hollow & simple..: "Can this be a stoner thought..reality brought..or just expressions to fill a void.. If two minds left alone fought..would words or physical shots be deployed.." --[Vocab]-- Vocab was right on cue....wasn't forced or you didn't try to add 13 letter words in here and there to make it look complex...your vocab had sense meaning and relativity about it....Everything was mean't to be where it is, takes a good writer to pull that off...dope. --[Concept]-- Bit of a dip in talent, concept wise, from what i've come to expect of you....yes, you had many quotables, but everything was kind of thrown about n' jumbled up....maybe that was the idea, but i don't think so.... --[Overall]-- In conclusion, it's one of your weaker pieces, not because of rhymes or lyrics, but by the way you went about it....3/5...only because i've come to expect alot more from you, and i have a exceptional high opinion of your work. Don't you have to be a "Legend" to get into Rb Legends...as in not only in writing but in character, activity and such as well...not saying ,Pen, you don't got that, but just wondering. |
another dope one form penskills...
as said above you have had a lot better of pieces im still waitin for ....III....(of the epic).... wanna see this dope shit... keep it up man I could learn from you.. |
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^thanks for your honest comments,much appreciated,and yes this was not one of my better ones far as depth.Although I think this is an enjoyable read not really heavy on the mind.something you read and have a light laugh about.It does get a little frustrating at times.I'm not saying all my pieces that got nomianted should've been nomiated.No one has ever really giving me a through breakdown and let me know what I really need to work on so I can get to the next level.It's always "He's only respected by Newbies,no known writers have any respect for him" I on the receiving end is like WTF? what must I do? let me know than,I was denied in SS(I've learned that there was a mistake)just stop saying I must be here longer to get respect.That's bullshit.In the short time I've been here I dropped quailty material and I'll continue to do that and nothing will change.(I'm talking about my OM's making it to Legends.Not me,I'm no where near around that area.) |
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^ I'm not a legend..far from that..Few of My OM's should be there though.... :banghead: |
I didn't mean like legendary members..just every piece in OM legends is by someone like Cam or N-Demik or Sand, you know....
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nice concept...flow was decent...nothin that could go on forever...but nice vocab and quotables...keep it up...
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iight...
Not as good as some other pieces... But still better than half the shit in OM... Nice vocabulary... Relevant aswell... Consistent enough flow... Not really much to critisize... Jus could of been more deep and heart-felt a think... Props though... Argued your point well... Keep it coming... Pz... |
anotha dope piece from you. all ya shyt is off the chain. i relli like this one tho cuz its things that alotta people wonder about. good flow, vocab was there. good quotables..
fave part.. Can this be a stoner thought..reality brought..or just expressions to fill a void.. If two minds left alone fought..would words or physical shots be deployed.. keep up i like seein' pieces from you.. |
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