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Edicius 02-09-04 11:28 AM

Shit.
 
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I dont care,keep rejecting my submissions
to me its..
a genre of art and literature that
represents events of my social conditions
An artistic movement W/
the abstract concepts exist independence of my self
the twists that turned
made it grow.. the inconvenience to oneself
See life is just a mix, of realistic and factual descriptions
Physical objects colliding..resulting, into a painting of..
Philosophical.. encryptions
W/ attribute's of acceptions, & rejections, ..
continued to exsist
& failure growed in my mirror's reflections..
when my physical drove further from detailed..
i still stroved..
To that feeling that was not prevailed..
& the favoring, stayed unrewarded..
the walls came closer & closer.
And i turned into a small wreck, fragile and..disorderd.

Shit.

menolin 02-09-04 11:41 AM

replys are so nice!!

lol, i liked this peice, nice immmagery, vocab was good, not really anything bad about it. the structure was very small! an it was a short piece!!

keep it up edicius

Penskills 02-09-04 11:44 AM

Quote:
Originally Posted by Edicius
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I dont care,keep rejecting my submissions

:laugh2: Lmao...I can relate...LMao..This was Dope..Misfits~~~~~

Edicius 02-09-04 11:51 AM

^Word : D

~Misfits.

fgee 02-09-04 11:54 AM

not bad
pretty raw piece
seemed like u were getting something off your chest
liked the rhyme scheme too..
suited the piece
good key man

N LitEnd 02-09-04 01:30 PM

^ You're Such A Wonka!

I Read This Before And I Liked It. Vocab Was Nice And Imagery Was Good. Like F-G Said, Seemed Like You Had To Get 'Shit' Off Your Chest.

Nice Piece

ELEETE 02-09-04 01:42 PM

Nice! I like the way this worked! the vocab was ill.....dope short piece! haha some lines you had i can truly see happened on this site various times lol..........but good shit Ed!! If you got the time hit my latest........id love to get some of your feedback!

Foresight
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=113141

lunatic 02-09-04 02:09 PM

it's alright keep it up but it needs some violence :shoot:

Penskills 02-09-04 06:19 PM

uppin~~~M!sf!ts~~~~~~~~~~~(I'm getting carried away with this shit)

Dev 02-09-04 06:22 PM

thought this was pretty good... the content favored it... ive seen better schemes from you....

FormulaMC 02-09-04 06:50 PM

Ill For What It Was. . Emotion, Nice. . Content. . Honest And Dope. . Vocab, Where It Should Be. . I Should Read More Of Your Drops Shouldn't I ? Don't Answer That. . Just Keep Um Dropping. . And I Shall View. . Pz.

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...376#post1168376
^ ^ Return The Favor. Thanks.

Edicius 02-10-04 11:30 AM

Lol @ pen uppin for me .. = O Upppper,.

Freeman 02-10-04 11:41 AM

When a saw the title... A thought... Hmm... This is going to be {insert title here}...

But that proved me wrong... It was far from shit...

Imagery was good... Flow was on... Structure eased the flow... All good...

Nothing much to critisize... Only that it was perhaps too short... Maybe...

Scraping the barrel there...

Good drop Ed...

Hit up the one in my sig...

Thanks...

Pz...

Edicius 02-10-04 12:57 PM

Word its part of a collab thats why its short.. lol..ill hit one of yours up.


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