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its easy to see im the illest emcee in the streets// to dope for the industry, cuz im alwayz bringin the heat//when i take out a .44 theres gonna be more dead, get a headache from wankstas//take it out, and put it in your head//rippin haters like paper, so fuck you if you hate me// face me, im ill enuff to give your dogs rabies//emcees get slain and splattered when they fuckin brains get batterd, insane ass rapper// but im the best, thats all that matters//i spit lyrical fire, spit lyrical shells galore// even if they miss you, i'll still murder you with metaphors//put several more in ya chest until you admit im the best// aint no competition, i know im better than all the rest//

theres no way you can win in a battle of you and I, matter of fact, you got a better chance of living thru suicide/ lyrical soulja, ya flows are sober and dead/ my words are a mighty river, that "flows over your head"/ my blows to ya head strike harder than white lightning, im frightening, with unique skillz that are actually worth biting/ but dont try me, or ya talent gets crashed like trade centers/ shoot ya so fast ya heads rotatin faster than plates spinnin/ so listen, close and i wont have to mention again, the danger of testin ya weak ass flows against the prince/ of rappin that is, so dont get it twisted at all/ cuz if you get hurt fuckin wit me, then homie, you are at fault/

I stoped reading after first few bars..your structure made it diffcult to read...peace..

aight pen thanx homie

well what can i say but welcome aboard. I mean like you do need some improvement but dont we all. keep working hard and continue doing your thing shorty.

..all self glorification
and structure fucked........
dint bother readin it coz of that
fix it.

yeah me too....
didnt even get onto the 3rd line
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i think da problem wit peeps like riff raff n manipulation is u cant read for shit yea da structure didnt go rite in da beginin but as u get 2 da second paragraph he really comes out n self glorification dis comin from a bitch so desperate she gotta suck dick 4 battle votes cuz all no deep doen u choke artist biitch n e ways good drop work on da structure kid n welcom 2 d team fuck des mark ass bitch made hataz fo real 1 luv peace out n holla back

damn i wrote this shit bout a year ago.....yall say whatever ya want i no its fucked up as hell

repost it n revamp"rewrite it" with better structure....cause its too hard ta read like that n get da flow...pc