RapVerse.com Community

RapVerse.com Community (http://community.rapverse.com/index.php)
-   Poetic Scriptures (http://community.rapverse.com/forumdisplay.php?f=9)
-   -   Where I Go (http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=113663)

shawty"B" 02-11-04 05:34 PM

Where I Go
 
On a lake in the middle of the sea
thats where i go
so no one can find me
on a peice of paper
on a pad of pages
i share with myself
the many stages
the stages that the scenes are set
some stages hold
my biggest regret
other stages hold the scene
of a fantasy
of a dream
a dream of hope
a dream of fears
a dream of laughter
a dream of tears
on a lake in the middle of the sea
thats were i go
so no one can find me

L.A.STR~E~TZ 02-11-04 06:45 PM

wow, great imagery. the scenic part of ure poem is what stood out the most to me. also the feeling of loneliness, but a good kind. not a strong rhyme scheme but it was short, so it didnt bother me too much. good poem overall. well it depends, if it was written fast, then good, if it took you more than a day, then i think you should have made it a lil more complex.

shawty"B" 02-12-04 04:15 PM

it was a 3 minit kinda poem


All times are GMT -4. The time now is 08:38 AM.