Timeless Love
 

Tik Tok is the sound of the clock
this deathening sound .....
..... has got my brain blocked
time is passing us by like a train
so how can we enjoy this short time frame
why is it all catching up so quick
do we have time to waste on a movie flick?
These questions ran around my mind untill......

She had beatifull eyes and made time stand still
every eye contact we made - made me ill
Somewhere deep inside me she made the clock tick
she had so much control over me it was problematic
like a spastic i couldnt control my heart -it was hers
but all she was is a curtain - like a evil curse
she left one dat and once again i beggin to worry.......

Does time bring end to this life , this story
Every day i sit , with my smoke lit....
experiencing another sadness fit....
Is time just short - or are we afread of being alone
why does time seem shorter- after its gone
I though so much ... no answer is apperent...
till she knocked on my door- like heaven sent....
now once again this time is frozen - and i dont worry
when she leaves again... it will continue this time wasting story.....

thought the first verse was the better of the three it had quite a smooth flow and transition, the last, was the weakest, specially with the rhyming, play'd topic, but it came across ok....

this was ok... i mean needed to be put together a lil better... i mean u had a nice thing goin but i mean u didn't quite .... MERK ... it ya dig??? you can only get better... keep doin ya thang dunny... yep...

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Caesar - On3