first real piece take a look
yo i'm the cripple in red
or the blood red crip ya, you heard what i said, dont make me bust you in the lip: this here's the federal ferret yo, he walks the walk in that he has merit but hell never talk. man, together well make you balk cause we sick like that the ferret, he likes to stalk man, me, i just rock, dont say nothin dissin or you i will sock man, you just pissin ill take you to the dock cu, youll sink like a rock your body the ferret will fill with weights so it dont float back to the top man stop that cryin heres a mop: 'snot like your dyin, fuck, them tears youd better sop, ~F2 *THIS RAP WAS WRITTEN BY FEDERAL FERRET AND INTENDED TO BE RAPPED BY THE BLOODY RED CRIP. :shoot: |
and this was a poem? this isn't worth the criticism...
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umm is all i have to say
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agrees with ripedfire.
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maybe poems isnt youre thing man
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that was pretty bad dog-- i can see your idea, its just a fucked up one
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well hummm see it...... well hum... didnt make no kinda sense
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all hail rapid fire haha
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your a bit whack - post it in a rap forum not poetic scriptures - from an old member with new id
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i didnt know what you were talking about
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Wasn't a poem...
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It was quite "unique" and "eccentric" whatever it was.....LOL...you fell off your bike on this one, dust yourself off and give it another go....
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your a newb..so I can't say anything bout it..well i was never as bad as u..but this isn't a poem...just keep tryin..and change your name..cuz first impressions always count..
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