Some.....
 

Sometimes I sit in the room and think to myself...
Sometimes it seems like I just sink into hell..
Someday, I'ma get the payback for what's been lost..
The love I once felt at the foot of the cross...

Some people seem to think that life is all beautiful...
But some of us only see the world as a funeral..
You're born, and then you'll live if you're lucky...
Afterwards u die...feel the angels or demons touching...

Somewhere, there's someone with this exact thought..
With an automatic weapon, tellin' people to back off...
Sometimes, I wonder if I even have a destiny...
Cuz sometimes it seems it's just to rest in peace...

<--- mind is blank...I'll finish this one day maybe..who knows? lol...

yo fam srry to see this being slept on an glad to see u delvin in poetry...its really not much dif from most rap stylez...

i thin that this is missin somethin an if u eva get it together u should finish this cuz i love the path its goin down...

i thought the way u used ur rhyme sparingly showed that u already kno was good an didnt turn it to a rap with excess of rhyme...

hope to see the end of this some day man

This reminds me of some song by Mos Def I was listening to on the way home from work just a minute ago. Not because of the content or anything. Just cause of how you were starting it with "Sometimes" a lot.

Anyways, it wasn't bad. I wasn't really following the story or whatever though. Kinda jumped around. Looks like you were just in a bad mood and started writing what came into your head. That's how it happens sometimes. Keep writing and posting them up.