~Moon Shyne
 

Color reflexin, stress over takin, Ruckus is here~ take ya last breathe/
my footsteps treadin in new territory, unique style, u wonderin wats next/
not here ta act tough or be cocky, here ta spit an take ish off my chest/
cuz life of an mc is stressed, most of us do dis cuz its a way to self-express/
little boys at home watchin the tv, an intakin the ways of the street/
reshapin their mind, makin em think its the only way out, cuz they cant face defeat/
look it straight in the eyes and conquer, like bad dream u could never wake up from/
sleepin and dreamin, on the inside yur screamin, yur hood made u cold, no room for feelins/
only thing u got left is the pen and pad, sumtimes u dont even have dat/
dats wen ure mind turns void, so empty u dont kno wats wrong or right/
strapped in the streets, u can never sleep at night/
lookin up at tha moon an shinin its warm glow at me/
so much adrenaline pumps in veins, its like im runnin at a track meet/
backin, tryin ta win, but the guy in front is fast/
cant beat him, an slippin for a second, the race is lost/
my minds tired, i cant even feel my legs, over and done, other sites didn't like so they had me banned/
i aint askin for much, but show some appreciation, i aint the best ta spit on the mic, or write on the pad/
jus like ta speak my mind, even tho it amkes others mad/
rap for sum is ever lastin- for others its just a teenage fad/
u can choose yur path, but dont choose mine/


heh not my best, but it was quick an im tired from last night. hit me up wit sum honest opinions. peace

This was ok....the structure could be fixed up though i think, the lines were stretched out and it took away from the flow i thought, try to shorten them down a bit....Had some ok vocab....try adding some more multies to this to make it flow better....but keep at it.