multi talented
 

this is basically multies aight peep

i'm so hazardous-i could slap you bastards-backwards
so fast-that you faggots-couldn't fathom-the fact-that-the action-acually happened
and it just so happens-i happen-to have-gat-in my jacket
match with-a magnum-to blast in-any cat-who crosses past-my path

and it's certain-i've heard-some words-that'll make me dispurse
some curses-that hurt-worse-than a virgins-first-time twurkin-a person
i'm sick cause i'm workin-by incertin-nurses-in the back of some black hurses-and lurkin-and jerkin-purses-for a purpose-that seems worth it-

which is my enterprise-which risin-so high-
over the horrizon-that no guy- can fly over my sky risers-
and if they try- i'll strike 'em-with lightin
from a triton- like zeus or possiedon- after fightin some of the titatins

which leads me back-to my battle rap-tactics
i use to attack rappers-and abuse rap fanatics
and confuse like mathematics- to fuse my rap status-
which i can't lose like bad habbits-
but can bruise like the ass of faggots
who wants it who has it-who's the baddest rapper at this
i'm the baddest rapper rappin-this thread prooves i'm the baddest

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soundz like someone just got finished listening to "So Sick"...but this piece was straight...some of the multiz were good...although I feel that you kinda lost ya flow in some parts...and work on ya structure...it makez the verse a WHOLE lot easier for otherz to read when it's in good structural form...and this ain't really had a concept or story behind it...but then again...it wasn't supposed to...so it's good for what it was...peep my open mic when you get a chance...it's called "Tortured Wordz" I think...I just thought of a quick title for it that soundz intellectual...lol...holla...

good lookin on the reply gun and i'll peep ya shit

i thought this was decent in some ways, thought the multis seemed a bit overused and so lost the flow, no need to highlight them either... i would take a few out, build in the scheme a bit.... and even the syllables out in places... but not bad.... keep at it...

nice piece.....flow was choppy in places but for a multie piece it was cool....sr8 drop
....peace

good lookin on the replies
still uppin

uppin for more

-t-t-t-t-t-t-t- dsnt make multis.
Im not even reading it, .. its wack writing with thousands of ----- in a verse,

Ok good multies however you lacked vocabulary …
Work on vocabulary and structure other then that
The multies did work…

peace

like i've said to many other fuckin retards if you're not gonna read the shit and come with replies or crit then shut the fuck up oh yea i don't give a fuck who you might in that case either

nice post decent multis needs better vocab other than that this shit was nice do some more man i'd like to see more from ya man.