Battle Feedback
 

Yo, I'm still pretty new 'round here, tried using more metas and shit in this one, don't know if thats good, I know you're gonna say elevate, and I'm tryin, so dont say that, just look at the piece then tell me some advice on what I need to improve, I tried to compare a battle to a regular nintendo controller in the last line, don't know how that worked out, give me some feedback, itd be greatly appreciated, thanks


This guy here battles with a dictionary in hand
Claimin’ he elevatin, but he can barely enhance
Like using a penis enlarger outside of your pants
Outside of France he’s not brave he’s a coward
Thinking that fast is zero miles an hour
Style devoured, like Shaq dressing in tights
This guy pees his pants, instead of gettin’ in fights
Accepting your rights, and you just got bitch slapped
I got you more scared, then the nights you were kidnapped
I meant that, Jack, I’ll put you back in your spittin’ box
Oh shit those are pimples? Man, I thought they were chicken pox
Hittin’ blocks (blacks), not racistly man, I’m just playin’ craps
What you tryin’ to say that he freestyles? I just say he raps
Statin’ the facts, that he’s almost always spittin’ a written
Like claimin’ you muff dived, after you’d bitten a kitten
Shit in the kitchen, yea man, you’re always ass backwards
You in a league of your own, (with all them other whack rappers)
Hat backwards, I should just call you fuckin’ Rosie O‘Donnell
Cuz the only thing out of the park is you and your Ladybugs at Mcdonald’s
Mano-a-mano, man its just you and me, and a friend over your shoulder
Up, down, left, right, start to select, its just A or B, like a Nintendo controller