sup new to the board
 

jus to start


I spit sick, see my verbs are multiplying//
You catch static vibes my flows electrifying//
Intertwining with cause rhymes breed like intercourse//
Opening doors to your mind and start mental wars//
Endorse with a primal force that’s scientific//
Rip ya flow with a style that’s canablelistic//
It’s sick shit-twisted-some say I’m sadistic//
Spitting hells fire leaving my tongue blistered//
Through illness in time I breed like bacteria//
Spreading seeds of rap with my own criteria//
I’m superia-your supernatural your styles fiction//
You don’t hold the throne cos. you cant stand the friction//
British lions defying the game through the alliance//
With compliance we run the game who spits the science//
Were the giants got your heads dazed crazed with violence//
Leave you paraplegic so now your life’s silenced//

.....peace

This was alright here.....just lose the // at the end of your lines, dont really need them....structure was alright, could be touched up a bit but it was good.....the flow to this was good i thought, it flowed well....you had some nice vocab in this...overall a alright piece...keep at it.

thanx man....notes taken....uppin