Feedback For This Please
 

I just wrote this freestyle-- lemme know----

Yo this motha fucka be tryin to talk shit-- actin like i got time for it
i dont wanna hear it and niether do you --these rhmes cant stick if they covered in glue---
i dont even know why you bother-- the truth is son i could be your father
fuck that dog now ill stop-- im to embarassed to be your own pop
your rhymes are patetic-- you couldnt get hot-- if i soaked you in gas and blew up that spot
your lyrics are junk-- i heard them last time and damn dude it stunk
not sayin you cant write new shit-- im just sayin dont cuz it aint even worth it


what do you think? comments please

Its aight...but not great...its acceptable for a keystyle i guess...kepp tryin' dawg...check out my post 'The Critic'...peace...

Thanks
 

yo thanks dog

Natas