Wats goin thru my mind!?
 

I kept it easy on my first few posts
ya comments made me chuckle
had me feelin like i was against the ropes
no where to run back to da turnbuckle

i type this shit wit da hope that it will turn sum heads
not make enemies but just make friends
which is good for u cuz my enemies usually turn up dead
face bloated lookin like a turnip, red

i hold down hella mics
im like an emcee wit three arms
in cyphers ur just happy to be there
like a immigrant who just got his greencard

i must confess im lookin to battle RB's best
i want that crown
i want the throne
imma take u down like a forsale sign on a house just sold

so if u think your competition
come at me wit ya best written composition
or imma use u as a toilet
and throw out the pot that i used to piss in

make u my personal outhouse, my personal urinal
whipe my ass wit ya eyebrows str8 up murder u
cuz thas juts wat i do i got much to prove
and believe me ni99a not much to lose

ok well you didn't say anything that hasn't been said before by somebody else (and better)

but otherwise your structure was ok and the vocab decent... tended to lose the rhyme in a couple spots like the whole last part....

make u my personal outhouse, my personal urinal
whipe my ass wit ya eyebrows str8 up murder u
cuz thas juts wat i do i got much to prove
and believe me ni99a not much to lose
^weak finish man, sorry

think outside the box and you will go far on this site....

{Peace}

yea no doubt i tend to get a lil lazy at times
come battle time ill step it up
thats another thing how i get a battle poppin?