I Wonder
 

hey, im new and dys is da first thang ive posted so dun be too mean... <3

i wonder if hes felt tha pain ive felt in tha black hole he calls his heart,
i wonder if hes ever had his emotions all torn apart,
i wonder if he'll feel tha same about me as i feel for him,
i wonder if he'll feel this way like i do again,
i wonder if i'll feel wut i feel for him forever,
i wonder if all these tears ive cried could go n form a river,
i wonder if i died tonite would he even shed a tear,
i wonder if he'd really ever loved me dear,
i wonder if he truly knos wut he's dun to me,
i wonder if he even cares.. well i do.. cant he see,
i wonder wut hed do if he were in mai position,
i wonder if he too would stay up at night jus dreamin and wishin,
i wonder i wonder i wonder,
that is how i spend mai time,
wonderin if im ever on his mind .....

~*~*xNottyXBabex*~*~

britania.. good shit.. listen work on the structure a bit make all the lines even it helps it soud better when they say it in they're mind.. overall nice tho.. work on vocab.. but some good stuff here britania

im liking this peice... reminds me of a girl who made me choose between her a hiphop... why do people do shit like that? hahaha anyway, yea i dig the concept probably more than i should... love the way the titles all working with the peice itself, tho this line "i wonder if all these tears ive cried could go n form a river" im not too sure about