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Sharp 02-17-04 04:39 PM

Introduction: MC Sharp
 
Yo everyone,


Er... Im new to this so go easy yo! Construction criticism more tha nwelcome. Enjoy! :thumbup:

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Ok, Ok, Someone shine me the light,
You know i just entered - not looking for a fight,
Im starting to like this place so i think i just might,
Make this site my home and visit each n every night/

Wondering now if the potential is within me,
To fix up look Sharp and become an MC,
For the very first time im giving this a go,
This is a test for my 'creativity' and 'flow'/

Shit now im nervous - am i gonna impress?
This my first lyric but is it making progress?
Yall got me dreaming of money and success,
This shit might just flop and cause me distress.../

So here i go with my first introduction,
You might like what i got, hoping for seduction,
All my life i been recieving to many instructions,
Time for me to put this shit into production/

Ok, Ok so every MC needs a name,
Meet me MC Sharp just seeking some fame,
I bet im not the first to make that claim,
Cant think of nothing better so fuck it - lets game/

Think i was inspired by eminem and 8 mile,
Big fan of his lyrics the guys got style,
Bet most of you hate him so dont go gettin hostile,
Then again hes premade bet he cant freestyle/

Oh goddamn look im all out of time,
Aint even got a minute to finish this rhyme,
Diss me, rate me, call my shit slime,
Im just spittin for a livin - aint no crime!

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ELEETE 02-17-04 04:54 PM

This wasnt too bad at all......It was pretty basic but overall it was pretty good......I like your messag as well.........People are gonna come in here an tell you that you dont have enough vocab an all this other junk but........ima tell you as if im trying to help......an i really am cause i wouldnt wanna steer you wrong.........keep writing........the more you do the faster youll run out of vocab to express things then youll go in search for new words on how to express everything.........i see potential........dont let what people say bring you down........keep doin your thing........peace!! hit up my open mic.......its link is in my signature.....an welcome!

UrbanReelist 02-17-04 06:53 PM

nice little intro peice you got here pretty nice couldn't used more vocab and prolly cut off the last part cuz it's alittle long


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