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Anthem Finished
it wasnt finished before.. hit this up tho
[Intro] I Speak These Words Because This Is Me.. [Hook] I Know It's Hard To Step In A Kid's Body With A Mind Of A Man I Know It's Hard But God Give Me Hope.. A Sign Of A Plan I Know It's Hard To Keep Away Your Skills A Overflowing Wanigan I Know It's Hard But These Are My Struggles And I Will Conquer Them My Song My Athem Compressed With Emotion All Those Past Years Did It Have A Different Notion Why Fight For Somthing Not There.. I Gotta Stay Focused Please Believe.. I'd Rather State This Motion Sealed Within My Soul, I Dont Hold The Answer My Uncle Died When I Was 10.. No Not From Cancer Suicide...... His Thought Of Life Was Rancor I Still Stay With My Pen and Paper.. My Deadliest Weapon I Rep My Asian Backround.. Pride Till Death Kid My Life Normal, But Consolidated With Conflicts I'm A Rebel, A Hero No I Cant Let This Harm Stick Pain Sorrow and Hate All Together Condensed Math Im X......... The Way I Never Stay Constant I'm Never Noticed Matter A Fact Im Impersonal Nobody Knows Or Cares And That's The Worst Of All First Born........ Does This Mean Im First To Fall Am I Cursed........ Or Is Everyone's Life Ill-Fated If I Ever Have A Chance To Make A Difference I Will State It This Is My Song, My Anthem, In Epic Porportions I Speak The Truth Im Not Fake I Will Inform This This Is Me, My Rules........... I Will Inforce This........ Please Believe [Hook] I Know It's Hard To Step In A Kid's Body With A Mind Of A Man I Know It's Hard But God Give Me Hope.. A Sign Of A Plan I Know It's Hard To Keep Away Your Skills A Overflowing Wanigan I Know It's Hard But These Are My Struggles And I Will Conquer Them Blacks Complain Abot Discriminating Whites Yet They Do It Everytime We Pick Up A Mic Do They Think Its Funny Or They Picking a Fight? No This Asian Aint Hatin So Face It Didnt You Know 7/10 Blacks Are Racist Not All, So Dont Get It Twisted Or Bent Man I Have No Room To Hate Love Is What I Sent Man But Is It Me Or Does It Seem Im Not Virtous No Excuses Because I Wont Exert To Fuss I'm Good In My Heart So I Will Make Sure You Trust Saying I'm All Good Would Be Making It So Simplistic I Got My Own Problems Deal With Yours, Go Fix It Deal With Both? Man Be REalistic My Dream.. I Missed It, Good Bye I Kissed It I'm Pretty Much Neglected And Never Respected I'm Trying To Get But Its Less Then Expected But Its Hard To Be, Im Not Conceded My Hopes And Dreams? They Pretty Much Depleted My Song, My Anthem, So Please Be Seated I Try My Best In Life But End Up In Heart Brakes As I Speak My Jaw Shakes,..... ...........Ya Know What Kinda Toll This Song Takes? Please Believe [Hook] I Know It's Hard To Step In A Kid's Body With A Mind Of A Man I Know It's Hard But God Give Me Hope.. A Sign Of A Plan I Know It's Hard To Keep Away Your Skills A Overflowing Wanigan I Know It's Hard But These Are My Struggles And I Will Conquer Them [Outro] I Know It's Hard I Know It's Hard I Know It's Hard |
this is dope!
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Nice piece. I didn't expect this. Nice Imagery, flow, and vocab.
7.5/10 drop feedback on my piece:http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=115121 |
damn i thought this shit was conserversial... alot of my lyrics should of brought up questions.. did you really read it?
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niceness here.....very rarely do i reply to an open mic....but this deserves some recognition.....u had nice flow and multis......good vocab....and showed great emotion, imagery, and concepts of thought.....
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Key: poor = 1 ok = 2 good = 3 very good = 4 excellent = 5 BREAKDOWN Emotion - Very Good Multis - Good Vocab - Very Good Concepts - Excellent Resources - Excellent Flow - Very Good RhymeScheme - Excellent Overall - very good drop without a doubt.......ur hook was emotional.....ur verses showed thought and good points and good questions.... Rating 9/10 peace |
Wow O valiant leader..first time I seen you post anywhere besides battles...whats next...*gasp* a cypher? lol
Annnnnyway....Tilleyedie..Much respect dawg..This shit was ill..Vocab and imagry was oof da hook..also a good peice cause it got me thinkin about what you were stating and that takes doin lol. Dope vocab and wordplay..Keep at it bro |
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