Life (Off The Top)
 

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Never know where life leads...until U walk its path
Noone to hold or console u...noone got ur back
So many befriend u...just to turn their backs
In the end it's just u...when ur foes attack
U battle back wit battle raps...swing and U get em back
Dismantle cats...set up traps...kill em and it's a wrap
It's a trap...set up for failure and u fell right in
Back to where u started...thinkin that u reached the end
Reach within...tryna to get the strength u need
Bleached wit sin...u can't repent...ur in to deep
U feel a surge of rage...feelin that ur in a cage
Knowin life is a story...but wishin u can turn page
U reached a phase...thinkin life's a conspiracy theory
Knowin the odds r against u...got u fearin them simply
Cuz u see no way out...can't think of no way how
U can break the cycle...and turn ur life about

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nice piece.. you had good vocab but it seems your rhymes were simple.. throw some bigger words to rhyme with or multiple words to rhyme with.. you know? But overall good piece

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